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What is your favorite food to eat? how do you prepare it?


xcom30 1 / -  
Mar 23, 2011   #1
I would like to mark my essay, since i wanna know whether my grammar, organization and so on are correct or not.
please help me...

As you know, food is very significant to live our lifetime, since there are many types of significant nutrition for those who live, exercise and so on. I suppose that if you are a person, you will have favorite food more than one. Of course, it could indicate healthy, traditional and junk food as if hamburger that calls junk food. In my case, I am fond of having egg-roll with a tuna as a side dish for three meals a day. Thus, I would like to explain why it is my preferred food that is based on the three reasons above and how to cook egg-roll in this essay.

First of all, nowadays, the majority of people tend to choose processed food as their daily meals, since it can effectively save time which is considered as money in our modern community. However, there are some negative effects, which include artificial elements, in processed food. In comparison, my ideal food, egg-roll that also could save time to eat as well as include positive nutrition such as protein, which is essential for building and repairing tissue and keeping your body strong and healthy.

When we eat some food at home or in dining room, most important thing is how food delicious is. For instance, some people said "food is an art". This means that food looks like an attractive picture and a beautiful statue; nevertheless, if taste is not suitable for a person, everything is not necessary to evaluate food. On the contrary, my favorite food has the advantage of people that whoever cooks folder egg, it can be very delicious. Make sure that it encourages people to easily try to make it for other people who share food with each other.

I guess I will make you want to try my favorite food. Well, I suggest you how to make egg-roll. At the beginning of cooking, you should prepare some of eggs, tuna tin, small cut vegetable such as carrot, and salt, which depends on what tastes you want. Especially eggs, you have to break it in a bowl after that you add everything in a bowl and mix those things by using spoon for approximately thirty seconds. Second, you spread those things on a frying pan and fry. Finally, while you are frying, the key point is you should fold mixed egg like sushi roll. If you want to add some sauce on made food, you can add whatever you want. However, I recommend you ketchup and steak sauce are suitable.

In conclusion, I talked about why I like this food and how to make it. I hope I will attract you try to cook it and want to share information about taste.

Chim Can Cook 10 / 23  
Mar 23, 2011   #2
The last paragraph is pretty well written, however in the some first paragraph, the expressions are a bit vague and awkward.
"how food delicious is"-> how delicious food is
Here are the expressions which I found
"if you are a person, you will have favorite food more than one". Do you mean every human being must have a favorite type of food?

"if taste is not suitable for a person, everything is not necessary to evaluate food" What message are you trying to convey, maybe you try to rephrase it

"my favorite food has the advantage of people that whoever cooks folder egg" this is awkward

In General, the essay is ok. However, I recommend you to vary sentence structures and widen your vocab in order to score high. Good luck!~ :P
limegreen12 - / 2  
Mar 23, 2011   #3
the "as if hamburger that calls junk food" part could be deleted.
Use only one of the two: "First of all", "nowadays"
"how food delicious is" should be "how delicious the food it"
I guess I will make you want to try my favorite food. Well, I suggest you how to make egg-roll: this sentence is too informal
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 25, 2011   #4
Thanks, everyone. I think future visitors to this thread can learn a lot from you!

When we eat some food at home or in a dining room, the most important thing is how delicious the food is.

For instance, some people said "food is an art". ----good!

This means that food looks like an attractive picture and a beautiful statue; nevertheless, if taste is not suitable for a person, everything is not necessary to evaluate food it is not high quality food, no matter how beautiful it is.

On the contrary, my favorite food has an advantage: regardless of who cooks the egg-roll, it can be very delicious.

Well, I want to suggest to you how to make egg-rolls.

However, I recommend you to you that ketchup and steak sauce are suitable.

In conclusion, I talked about why I like this food and how to make it. I hope I will attract you try to cook it and want to share information about the taste.

:-)


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