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pg_mbastudent

May 11, 2011

Graduate / "To expand the horizon to Asian market" - MBA Application [8]

Thanks Kevin, I will make those changes.

One question - For the word limit, I went by the concept - if I have been given a budget of 1 million for a project and I am completing it in less than a million, its more preferrable. So similarly, although the word limit is 250, i am trying to use only 248 or so, is that a gud approach?

- PG

pg_mbastudent

May 11, 2011

Writing Feedback / TOEFL>Increased teacher's salary will improve the quality of education in a country [4]

I am glad my comments helped. I liked that u introduced some facts, that is a good thing. You are also making some strong points by saying how paying less to teachers might affect the whole education system and how it would motivate the teachers to do their best. So yes the essay is formed pretty well.

I am not sure about your word limit for the essay. If you are above word limit, then there are few sentences that I felt were repeatitions, you can probably get rid of those.

I would say use Microsoft Word to get rid of any of those grammatical and spelling mistakes, that should help u a lot.

Gud Luck !

pg_mbastudent

May 11, 2011

Graduate / Why have you chosen to pursue your MBA on a part-time basis? [2]

Please review the following -

Once I realized that I need to bridge the gap in between my current skills and what I need in order to achieve my short term and long term goals, the next thing to decide was either to go for full-time or part-time MBA. I chose to go for part-time MBA since I feel that continuing with my work would help me implement what I learn during my MBA in the practical world. I can help my company grow along with myself by sharing the ideas I am going to learn at the business school. Additionally, I did not want to lose the touch with the business world because I feel it is so important for someone to be involved with the day-to-day activities and upgrades happening everywhere from technology to the way things are implemented in real world and if you lose touch it is hard to catch up with the pace of growing world.

pg_mbastudent

May 1, 2011

Graduate / "To expand the horizon to Asian market" - MBA Application [8]

Hello Mike,

Thanks a lot for ur valuable suggestions, I made the changes accordingly.. and it helped me get rid of those few extra words too :)

I think 10% + / - on the word limit works. And I am a bit more than that. I will try to reduce it further..

Also, I read somewhere if you start ur essay with a picking quote or something, it makes a gud impact. is that true? tht's the reason i chose one to just jump start the whole introduction :).. Plz suggest, I wud be happy to make changes.

Another thing I felt was that my ending looked kind of unfinished. may be coz i was reading it over and over. Did you get the same feeling?

I appreciate all your help. Thanks !

- pg

pg_mbastudent

May 1, 2011

Graduate / "To expand the horizon to Asian market" - MBA Application [8]

Hello,

This is the first time I am writing an essay for my part-time MBA admission. Please help me to improve by providing your valuable comments. I overshot the word limit by few words (290 instead of 250), so please suggest wherever you feel I can reduce that.

Thanks in anticipation!

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What are your short-term and long-term career goals? (250 words)

I was brought up into being a very responsible person by a single mother working very hard to provide the basic necessities to her 3 children - good values, education and living standard. Seeing her, taught me to fight my own battles and be the best in what I do. After completing my formal education, I stepped into the professional world at an early age of 20 and gained diverse experience in different technologies as well as domains.

My short term goal is to apply my past experience, business acumen, technical edge and education to propose and oversee robust and cost effective engineering solutions, managing an effective team, experience key aspects of managing a business and achieve professional advances in my career.

My sense of ownership, responsibility, passion for learning and culmination of short term goals will help me achieve the long term goal: to be an entrepreneur and establish a consulting firm that focuses on providing efficient and highly scalable software solutions to clients based in the US, then eventually expanding to the Asian market. Coming from Indian origin, my business can benefit from my understanding of Asian as well as American culture.

Although my 10 years of professional experience helped me to mature and understand intricacies of business, in order to achieve my goals, I feel my leadership and management skills can be improvised by completing this program. I believe Langone MBA program from NYU-Stern can help me fulfill my dreams and become a well-rounded personality.