Undergraduate / Essay on art education [7]

Body 1: explains well a small but interesting experience
Body 2: explains nicely about what you love and your personality. However, maybe a little more information about your artistic experiences would be helpful to get a better picture of you and your talents.

Body 3: explains why you want to attend the university ending with an excellent conclusion.

Overall well thought out essay. However, there are some small grammar mistakes which I will let the moderators handle.

Good Luck!

Undergraduate / Short Answer Response, two stories. Which one to chose? [18]

"After two weeks, he handed me a check for JMD$14,000. I had made a profit of JMD$7,000!"

Yes I agree I with most that you must explain why you are a good investor becuase the above statement does not prove that you are a good investor. What It may serve to prove is that you got lucky.

As investor myself you must be a have track record of doing well to be considered good at investor. Therefore, I suggest you explain your track record and skills in your essay to prove you are actually a good investor.

Also, you write, "After two weeks, he handed me a check for JMD$14,000". After two weeks of what? Did it take that long for the cash to settle in your account?

In summary, I think you have a great essay coming along but but you must clarify and further explain yourself.

Cheers!

Undergraduate / Need advice on essay question- "Unique characteristics and experiences" [3]

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