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Joined: Jul 10, 2011
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fairwind   
Jul 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'valuable and irrecoverable'; Should a city preserve its old buildings? [6]

maintain their old and historic building

Thank you for your help. But I feel a little confused.
In my grammer textbook, the author gives the following examples:
A tall and handsome boy. (X)
A tall, handsome boy (O)
The boy is tall and handsome (O)

I want to know why "maintain their old, historic buliding " is worng.
Thanks.
fairwind   
Jul 27, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: If no food at home we should have a restaurant in the neighborhood [4]

Although many people oppose to this plan, but I support of a new restaurant in our neighborhood. I prefer this plan as a fun because it can bring me much fun and allow me to buy food when I'm in a hurry or there is no food at home., when we are in a hurry, and we need to eat foods quickly, and when there is no food at home.

In these decades, most of the people in a society, especially in these decades, go in to the restaurants just for as a fun. Indeed, various kinds of foodat restaurants are motivatingesthe families to have meals in the restaurants.

You make some good points, but I think the first example in the passage is not appropriate.
fairwind   
Jul 27, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'valuable and irrecoverable'; Should a city preserve its old buildings? [6]

Hello everyone, I'm practicing my writing skills. I hope that you can give me some suggestions or corrections! Thank you.

Topic:
Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Essay:

Having old and historic buildings in a city has lead to a debate. Some people think it wasteful to maintain their old, historic building while other people want to preserve them because they are valuable and irrecoverable. In my opinion, it is worthwhile to replace the old, historic buildings with modern ones. The reason is that old buildings not only take too much money to maintain but also occupy the available spaces in a city.

First, maintaining the old, historic buildings is a money-consuming task. For one thing, the government has to spend much money on hiring guards to protect the old buildings which are usually under danger situation. Thieves or hoboes can easily come into the buildings and cause any destruction because there are only few and even no people living in them. For another, maintaining the old, historic buildings also costs a lot. To keep the fragile buildings been in a good condition, the government has to hire experts and buy materials to maintain the old buildings. However, such a policy may account for certain proportion of the government's budget and even leads to a financial deficiency in the long run.

Second, the old, historic buildings occupy spaces that are available for modern buildings. In general, the old buildings have few floors and old-fashioned equipments. The modern buildings, on the other hand, usually have more floors such as ten or above. The additional floors enable more people to live in and provide more spaces for people to plan and develop. What's more, the modern buildings equipped with modern facilities that make life easier and more comfortable. Classic examples include electricity and water supply, internet access and air-conditioner.

To sum up, I think that it is a good idea for a city to replace the old, historic buildings with modern ones because it can save a lot of government money, allow more residents to live in and raise people's living conditions.
fairwind   
Jul 24, 2011
Writing Feedback / Free mobile phone and access to the Internet to find jobs sponsored by tax payers? [9]

Free mobile phones and free accessing to the Internet will provide many useful opportunities for the unemployed to find jobs.

In opinion, the second paragraph should explain that why free mobile phones and free access to the Internet help people to find jobs.
For example,
"Providing free mobile phones and free access to the Internet as one of the best ways makes it possible for the unemployed to have more chances in job market."

Also, the conclusion can be stronger.
"To sum up, increasing access to job opportunities will help the unemployed to find jobs. Therefore, I think it important for the government to provide free mobile phones and free access to the Internet to unemployed people."
fairwind   
Jul 22, 2011
Writing Feedback / CAMBRIDGE TOPIC; The widespread use of the Internet [7]

a wide range of knowledge

people have a chance to facilitate their works by using internet such as, we can arranging our vacation more easyeasierby using internet.

We can make hotel reservations, buy our tickets,and get information about the place where we go.

soBy using internet, I can google it and get any kind of information about the place and make my resevations as well.

internet provides people

other countries and even from other continents
fairwind   
Jul 10, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Modern cooking methods have improved our life-style significantly [4]

Topic: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With technology advances, food has become easier to prepare in modern days. People now can use kitchen appliances such as microwave and toaster to cook their meals easier and more convenient than before. Also, instant food products take only a few minutes to be made into delicious meals. These changes make cooking so easy-to-use and time-saving as to improve the way we live to a great extent.

First of all, people have more chance to do other activities they like since food preparation is no longer time-consuming. For instance, such a change has liberated many housewives from tedious cooking process and gave them additional time to do something more meaningful like accompanying family or doing a job. On the other hand, more people can sleep a bit later to go to work because they only need a couple of time to prepare for the breakfasts.

At the second point, since food preparation has become easier and more convenient, it is certainly great to preserve diverse kinds of foods at home. People can have a variety of dishes even in a small meal and choose whatever they like. More men, on the other hand, are willing to participate in cooking that they had never done before. This transformation may bring positive impacts to family in some cases.

In conclusion, the time-saving, simple food preparation process gives us more time to do other activities, more chance to select diverse kinds of foods and more willingness to cook meals. Of course, there may be some other perspectives that I neglected to fully consider. Nevertheless, for the reasons that I have presented above, I would assert that this change has improved our life significantly.

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Hello everybody. I'm new to here. I'm practicing my writing skills for the TOEFL test.
I'm very worried about my writing part since I ususally have no idea about the topics.
Indeed, this is my first essay which takes me over six hours to finish it.
I will do more practices as I can, so please help me improve my writing skills.
I am looking forward to your reply. Thanks!
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