Writing Feedback / Ielts: Telecommuting and working at home [2]

Telecommuting' refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer
Technology. Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting

Nowadays, more and more workers are bringing their office jobs to the comforts of their homes and using today's advance computer technology to get in touch with their bosses. This method called Telecommuting is like to be widespread among office workers in the next few decades. In this essay, I will discuss the possible effect of this growing trend in our society.

Working at home can be a very beneficial both to us and to the environment. You can save lots of money because you do not have drive or commute to work. In addition, for those who own a car, the less they use it, the lesser CO2 they emit, it is like hitting two birds with one stone. Moreover, there is nothing more irritating than getting late for work because of heavy traffic, but with your home as your workplace, you do not have to worry about that. Finally, working at home allows you to spend more time with your family which is very important to in building a nice and warm relationship

My sister for instance is one of the many who benefits from this system. My sister used to work in an office as an online tutor for Koreans, it was a great job but also a little dangerous because she had to work at night and came home past midnight most of the time. Conveniently, my sister found a similar job but this time, she can do it from home. Now, she does not have to worry about how much the price of the gas is, taxi fares and also, being late because of traffic. With her current work, she had more spare time than she had before and she appears to have a better mood.

Although sometimes, especially for mothers, daily life can interfere with work such as kids and house chores, but this is nothing compared to the benefits of working at your own house

To sum it all up, with the help of our current technology, telecommuting can definitely change life as we know it in a good way.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: disruptive kids should be taught separately [6]

Good day. this is a practice essay I wrote in preparation for my IELTS exam... Please feel free to comment, suggest and make corrections so that I can improve my writing skill..: )

SITUATION: Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer

It cannot be denied that ill-behaved students can affect others' behavior. However, I strongly disagree that blatant or defiant students should be placed in a separate class from the other students. In this essay, I will provide reasons to support my stand.

Students may behave badly but isolating them from the others is not the answer. While disruptive students may influence others, the same can be said to them, they can also be easily impacted with the well behaved ones. Coupled with a good guidance from their teacher, these students are more likely to improve their behavior rather than get worse. Moreover, a good model and proper discipline is essential. Parents should be taught the importance of role modeling and disciplining their children because what kids see and experience at home affect their general behavior.

As an example, when I was still in high school, a student with a reputation of being frequently absent and late transferred to our school. He was not treated specially; in fact, he got the same treatment as everybody else. However, tardiness and absenteeism are not tolerated in our institution, every late and absent mean you have to write an explanation letter signed by your parents and additional cleaning duties after class. I myself have tried this a few times, it is very exhausting to sweep, and mop and pick up other people's trash. In addition to that, it is annoying when you get left behind after school hours while others can sit down and relax in their own houses. Finally, if no change is seen after those punishments, the parents are asked to school to see the principal and the teacher to discuss the student's conduct as well as what can be done at home to correct this problem. Apparently, this system seems to work because, after countless cleaning duties and trips to the principal's office, the new student's attendance record improved by a mile.

One can argue that creating a class specially designed to deal with disobedient children is the best solution but through this method, we may be causing the children to think that they are not normal and can possibly impede there growth as a whole.

As a conclusion, behavioral problems cannot be solved by separating those badly behaved students to another class. Instead of worrying of which student goes to which group, it would be more appropriate to think of a solution without having a child go through a feeling of isolation.