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computer have negative effects on children. agree or disagree?? [4]
It is
common today that computers are
commonly used at home.
Pick a different word so you don't have "common" and "commonly" in the same sentence. This can be seen in children who are using
itthem after school or
inon the weekends. It is agreed that is has negative effects on them.This will be proven by taking into account the health and safety hazard as well as interfering natural development of the young people.
Maybe combine these last two sentencesLooking first at the health and safety hazard computers might cause them.
<Fragment For example, children who are staying for longer hours on the computer may have eyestrain and become obese. This example makes it clear that this type of technology may have affected the well-being of the children. Thus, there is an obvious link between health and safety hazard as a negative effect on children using computers.
Secondly, computers may interfere with the natural development of the children. Sharing non-virtual experiences is important part of the child's development that cannot be provided by computer. For instance, young people do not play with their classmates outside the house. Instead they
wereare using computers as a means of playing. It is obvious when looking at this example that the physical and social development of the children may not establish
ed because of sedentary lifestyle. From this, it can be concluded that using computers may affect the progress of the children.
After analyzing the areas of health and safety hazard
s, as well as interfering natural development, it has been proven that computers have adverse effect on children.
Either say "computers have an adverse effect" or "computers have advrese effects". It is predicted
not sure if predicted is the right word to use here that parents should have rules in implementing usage of computers to their children everyday.
I enjoy your essay. I am writing one of my essays along this line on how our society is so dependent on technology. I think this is a great start!