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Posts by AMiNENGiNE
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Last Post: Jan 24, 2012
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AMiNENGiNE   
Jan 24, 2012
Writing Feedback / Classmate in schools can lead children to reach to progression and triumph [5]

Classmates are more important influence than parents on a child's success in school. (Agree/Disagree).

Truth be told, successfully of students and children in schools has granted a lot of interest in our life. As a matter of fact, influence of classmates or parents on child has a dramatic effect on people's lives from all walks of life. In spite of the fact that we might not like to admit it, classmates are a more important influence than parents on child's success in schools, together with its genuine benefits, can create many a dramatic issue for parents. I agree with the following statement, and the major points that I will address in this essay for state my approval are: work-group and challenging.

First of all, students should learn how to do work-group in school and merge with each other that help them to work on exams and their projects. For example, when I want to work on an article or paper, I use my classmates to help me and get more ideas from them to finish my paper. So, if you need to success during your schools, you should learn how to match with other classmates and doing jobs as a group.

Secondly, one of the big targets at schools is reaching to top level and gets top 10% among the students that it prompt to create a challenge between students. Provided that students work together and use their classmates, this major will create among them. For instance, the exam entrance of university can make them to challenge with each other around their country to reach to high education and better future. As a result, being with other child and classmate can create a sense of challenge between them to getting achievement.

I have no illusion that my claims will be palatable to all. Indeed the most difficult part will be influence of classmates on children to success than parents. As the aforementioned examples show, I hope that this analysis can help to people that classmate and friend in schools can help children to reach to progression and triumph. But is this the whole story? What about good teacher to success?

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AMiNENGiNE   
Jan 22, 2012
Essays / How to improve my essay writing, waiting for suggestions [7]

Salam mehak.

In the first, you should concentrate on academic vocabularies because it can thrive your mind and your abilities for writing. My suggestion is the book of "Cambridge Vocabulary for IELTS".

Secondly, to start I suggest you take a look at Grammar books such as Cambridge Grammar for IELTS that is enough to be strong at writing because one the major points at writing is grammar.

Finally, There are a lot of academic writing books for IELTS in the web that learn you how to write an academic essay.

BE COOL.
AMiNENGiNE   
Jan 21, 2012
Essays / Help on Literature Review of a TESOL Research Paper! [2]

Dear giathu.

To solve question 1, I suggest check the following links:

aclacaal.org/Revue/vol-9-no1-art-kissau.pdf
203.72.145.166/ELT/files/53-4-3.pdf
bcatml.org/LLED325/kissau-gender.pdf
ijar.lit.az/pdf/10/2011(10-46).pdf

BE COOL.!!! \m/
AMiNENGiNE   
Nov 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / Facebook & www requires english; learning a foreign language early at school. [NEW]

It is strongly believed that the role of language in our life is taken for granted. Can you speak English? This question was the first question that asked me to answer that when I wanted to apply to the University of Birmingham. I could not answer this question properly because my English language was very weak and I believed that this is because of my school that could not learn to me foreign language. So I personally agree and I am firm to this statement " children should begin learn foreign language as soon as they start school". Here in this essay an attempt is made to state that communication and continuing education need to foreign languages.

First of all, in this century, Internet changes people's communication and relationships among all around the world. For example, the Facebook is the bigger network societies that people can speak and chat with together. As you know, this network society and other details of Internet need to foreign languages such as English language mostly. As a result if you want to convey with other people around the world or uses Internet, you should learn foreign languages specially English, so the children should learn to foreign languages as soon as that can use Internet.

Moreover, there are a lot of big and appropriate universities around the world that students can continue their educations at these but the majority of this universities need to foreign language like English to application. For instance, I have a strong resume and letter of recommendation that maybe I can admitted to the best universities of Canada but my English language is very weak and I have not had a good TOEFL iBT score until now to get application from this universities. It was because of my bad school in childhood that did not learn to me English language and my foundation language is very weak. So the children should oblige to learn foreign languages whom they can continue their studies at other universities.

In the final analysis, considering the above-mentioned remarks, I personality believe that If you are parents of your children, you should register them to a good school that can learn foreign language to them and they have no problem at the future lives. After all, do you believe that the children should learn other skills such as Computer at childhood?
AMiNENGiNE   
Nov 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / Should governments spend more money on improving roads, or public transportation ? [2]

It is strongly believed that the role of transportation in our life is taken for granted. As a matter of fact, transportation has a dramatic influence on people's lives from all walks of life. Although we might not like to admit it, transportation, together with its genuine benefits, can create many a dramatic problem for human beings. Here in this essay an attempt is made to prefer spend money for improving public transportation for several reasons.

Firstly, in the following decade, one of the big targets that nations are conflict with that is the transportation because this role can create a lot of opportunities such as reducing traffics and accidents. For example, subways, urban-railway and monorails are the best public transportation that can transport huge people between locations and it can reduce more and more cars and other vehicles that are prompt to accidents and traffics at roads. So it is very substantial because public transportation improved both traffics and accidents.

Moreover, as you know, cars need oil and gasoline for driving, so you should spend more money and time for supply this source for your car. For instance, averagely, the cost of one liter fuel for any car is 1.5 dollar. If you have a small car, you need about 30 liter fuels for your car and you should spend 45 dollar money therefore this is not suitable and useful. Additionally, when your car needs fuel, you should go to the fuel places and spent a lot of time for fueling your car. In my estimation, public transportation prompts to reduce cars at highways and saving time and money.

As far as I am concerned, considering the abovementioned remarks, I personally believe that public transportation is very substantial and better than self-driving at roads and streets because of a lot of reasons such as reducing traffics, accidents and saving money and time. Do you approve with me or not?

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AMiNENGiNE   
Nov 13, 2011
Undergraduate / 'The word physics summons two scenes' - Why MIT essay [6]

No, It wasn't troll response. It was my opinion either good or bad.

I think you had that problems and maybe they were valid.

If my response was not good for you, you can ignore it. :D

Best regards.
AMiNENGiNE   
Nov 12, 2011
Undergraduate / 'The word physics summons two scenes' - Why MIT essay [6]

Hi.

I read your essay, and i think this is excellent, plus it have a lot of good points.
However, I personality believe that your writing have a few short sentences such as " The essay is not really concluded, as you can tell." that it can reduce your essay, so you should use strong and long sentences.

On the other hand, your structures are simple, and they are mostly COORDINATING structures such as " This is a weird rough mix, but I think it's shaping up. ".

Therefore, if you need high score, you should use more complex structures -SUBORDINATING structures -
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