williams01
Dec 20, 2011
Undergraduate / 'A-level over Nepal government's +2 level' - Vassar [4]
Thank you !I ll try to work on that...
Thank you !I ll try to work on that...
williams01
Dec 19, 2011
Undergraduate / 'A-level over Nepal government's +2 level' - Vassar [4]
Please! help me with everything ...grammar ,punctuation and language !!
thanxx!!
HOW DID YOU LEARN ABOUT VASSAR AND WHAT ASPECTS OF OUR COLLEGE DO YOU FIND APPEALING?
I chose to study A-level over Nepal government's +2 level courses because I wanted to study both physics and economics, which +2 curriculum restricted. Even for my higher education, I was in search of a college where I could get liberal but rigorous education. As an international student, I also needed a community where I could fit so that I could excel academically. In this search for an institution, I engaged myself in extensive internet research about liberal arts colleges and this is how I learned about Vassar. Vassar had most of the things that I wanted academically as well as personally. In addition to being attracted to the closely-knit community at Vassar, I also love how Vassar respects independence of thought.
When I watched the video on 'What is a must class at Vassar?', I was fascinated by the names of the courses and also mesmerized by the available range of courses. I assumed myself as a Vassar student and started imagining what I could study at Vassar for my academic fulfillment. Along with pursuing the disciplines I was much interested in; I could also discover my potential interests among the courses offered at Vassar. Academic internship on one-to-one basis with the faculty mentors was another very attractive opportunity. Through my site research, I also got familiar to the various equipment resources and opportunities of internship at national laboratories available to a physics student at Vassar. Professionally, I want to be an engineer. Therefore, I was particularly appealed by 'The Vassar-Dartmouth dual degree program in Engineering.' Then, I saw a video where students were using pads to take notes and learn more in their field study. As I imagined myself working with professors at the physics laboratory with latest technology, my desire to attend Vassar got boosted.
After I took the virtual tour of Vassar and got a glimpse of Vassar through the pictures on Vassar's site, I became sure I could easily spend four years of my life at such beautiful campus. Houses like home and kitchen menu decided by the students themselves seemed exciting. Since, students are deemed to be the architects of life at Vassar I thought of the extent to which I could contribute to life at campus. I could not think of any dissatisfaction and hence, there would be very less matters to complain about. Life would be free at Vassar in every way.
A lot of things about Vassar appeal to me. If given a chance, I know at Vassar I can grow intellectually and emotionally plus get a wonderful college experience.
Please! help me with everything ...grammar ,punctuation and language !!
thanxx!!
HOW DID YOU LEARN ABOUT VASSAR AND WHAT ASPECTS OF OUR COLLEGE DO YOU FIND APPEALING?
I chose to study A-level over Nepal government's +2 level courses because I wanted to study both physics and economics, which +2 curriculum restricted. Even for my higher education, I was in search of a college where I could get liberal but rigorous education. As an international student, I also needed a community where I could fit so that I could excel academically. In this search for an institution, I engaged myself in extensive internet research about liberal arts colleges and this is how I learned about Vassar. Vassar had most of the things that I wanted academically as well as personally. In addition to being attracted to the closely-knit community at Vassar, I also love how Vassar respects independence of thought.
When I watched the video on 'What is a must class at Vassar?', I was fascinated by the names of the courses and also mesmerized by the available range of courses. I assumed myself as a Vassar student and started imagining what I could study at Vassar for my academic fulfillment. Along with pursuing the disciplines I was much interested in; I could also discover my potential interests among the courses offered at Vassar. Academic internship on one-to-one basis with the faculty mentors was another very attractive opportunity. Through my site research, I also got familiar to the various equipment resources and opportunities of internship at national laboratories available to a physics student at Vassar. Professionally, I want to be an engineer. Therefore, I was particularly appealed by 'The Vassar-Dartmouth dual degree program in Engineering.' Then, I saw a video where students were using pads to take notes and learn more in their field study. As I imagined myself working with professors at the physics laboratory with latest technology, my desire to attend Vassar got boosted.
After I took the virtual tour of Vassar and got a glimpse of Vassar through the pictures on Vassar's site, I became sure I could easily spend four years of my life at such beautiful campus. Houses like home and kitchen menu decided by the students themselves seemed exciting. Since, students are deemed to be the architects of life at Vassar I thought of the extent to which I could contribute to life at campus. I could not think of any dissatisfaction and hence, there would be very less matters to complain about. Life would be free at Vassar in every way.
A lot of things about Vassar appeal to me. If given a chance, I know at Vassar I can grow intellectually and emotionally plus get a wonderful college experience.
williams01
Nov 10, 2011
Undergraduate / 'mechanical engineering course' - department or program at MIT appeals to you [9]
It is better than last one ... :)
bt ill like to comment on one thing : I think the last part may appear like you are bragging ..
The photo-interferometer utility of the Nano-Structures Laboratory, the expertise of Professor Sang-Gook Kim on the design of nano-scale products: muscle-inspired-actuators and nano-electro-mechanical-systems (NEMS), plus the acquisition of hands-on experience in engineering through UROP are exactly what I require to advance my idea of devising therapeutic nano-robots that can make prominent contribution to the field nano-partice treatment.
This is just a suggesstion ...do as u please .
P.S Happy writing:)
It is better than last one ... :)
bt ill like to comment on one thing : I think the last part may appear like you are bragging ..
The photo-interferometer utility of the Nano-Structures Laboratory, the expertise of Professor Sang-Gook Kim on the design of nano-scale products: muscle-inspired-actuators and nano-electro-mechanical-systems (NEMS), plus the acquisition of hands-on experience in engineering through UROP are exactly what I require to advance my idea of devising therapeutic nano-robots that can make prominent contribution to the field nano-partice treatment.
This is just a suggesstion ...do as u please .
P.S Happy writing:)
williams01
Nov 10, 2011
Undergraduate / 'cooking helps me create' - common app extra curricular [7]
thxx pppl
nw it is 981 charecters thx ... :)
thxx pppl
nw it is 981 charecters thx ... :)
williams01
Nov 9, 2011
Undergraduate / 'mechanical engineering course' - department or program at MIT appeals to you [9]
This is nice ..s . u have done a wonderffull job with the wrd limit :) ....i felt that the last sentence is a bit long
involved in is better than involved with
good luck with MIT
This is nice ..s . u have done a wonderffull job with the wrd limit :) ....i felt that the last sentence is a bit long
involved in is better than involved with
good luck with MIT
williams01
Nov 9, 2011
Undergraduate / 'MatheMe' - application-personal essay [4]
you have nice theme bt i thnk its better to focus on why cornell's engineering interests you more ... after all, you will be talking about your accomplishments in xtra xurricular section of common app .Do as you please.
replace 'parallel with' by ' parallel to '
There is no use of however..there is no contrast in your fourth sentence...
P.S try to work a little more on cohorence
you have nice theme bt i thnk its better to focus on why cornell's engineering interests you more ... after all, you will be talking about your accomplishments in xtra xurricular section of common app .Do as you please.
replace 'parallel with' by ' parallel to '
There is no use of however..there is no contrast in your fourth sentence...
P.S try to work a little more on cohorence
williams01
Nov 9, 2011
Undergraduate / 'cooking helps me create' - common app extra curricular [7]
please, help me with this essay .esp. grammer :) Thnxx
When I lay my dish on the plate I feel bliss like an artist must feel after completing a painting. For me cooking is the highest form of art which requires accuracy, precision and creativity. Yes, cooking helps me create along with satisfying my love for food.
I was always an ardent lover of food but, started to cook only after my grandma taught me the function of spices. From then on, I have been following my passion for cooking. I still experiment with recipes adding little bit of my own part to it. A sense of excitement and enthusiasm always back these experiments making me feel sedated. These experiments are ethereal where I concentrate to add a crisp to French- fries or give a beautiful yellow colour to boiled rice. I love to cook for my friends and my family it helps me give them a share of my pleasure of cooking.
please, help me with this essay .esp. grammer :) Thnxx
When I lay my dish on the plate I feel bliss like an artist must feel after completing a painting. For me cooking is the highest form of art which requires accuracy, precision and creativity. Yes, cooking helps me create along with satisfying my love for food.
I was always an ardent lover of food but, started to cook only after my grandma taught me the function of spices. From then on, I have been following my passion for cooking. I still experiment with recipes adding little bit of my own part to it. A sense of excitement and enthusiasm always back these experiments making me feel sedated. These experiments are ethereal where I concentrate to add a crisp to French- fries or give a beautiful yellow colour to boiled rice. I love to cook for my friends and my family it helps me give them a share of my pleasure of cooking.
