Undergraduate / 'run like a winner' - UC prompt #2 for UCLA [13]

I am not sure but "Next, I worked with the engineer to make the model at every weekend." wouldnt it be Next i worked with the engineer every weekend to make the model.??

Undergraduate / reckless; How my mistakes i made in high school made me a better person-UC essay [3]

Although it is a pretty good beginning avoid contractions, they are informal.In addition i think you should remove some parts which may not be that significant and add more of the second part of the prompt "how does it relate to the person you are?"