Posts by Wytkewicz27
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'I questioned my life' - UCF essay Obstacle [3]
The essay is "write about an obstacle you have overcome in your past" and i am wondering what i could add to the ending others have said what i have so far is good
Undergraduate /
UC Prompt 1 Constant Moving: a reflection on the importance of education [3]
This would be a better obstacle essay than one about education. some suggestions would be to tie in how education has transformed through the generations. how now a days we have more chances to go to colleges or more schooling and more knowledge offered. bring knowledge into it more because that is the prompt. you could definitely bring in some of your own experiances because it shows a side of you the audiance does not know but you cant lose your essay in talking about yourself. write more about education
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'at least one activity that dominated my time' - Most Interesting Experience Essay [2]
Most interesting experiance includes only one experience not an expanded time period of your life. for experiance you can put (this is made up) but finding a spider in your shoe throwing it against a wall running away and coming back seeing it was gone. and nobody cares about your friends it is about you trying to get into college not them.
cosigners big words sometimes are not the best thing to use. this does not flow well with the rest of your essay.
Undergraduate /
'I questioned my life' - UCF essay Obstacle [3]
Once, I questioned my life. I questioned what I meant to the world and if I meant anything at all. I could not find an answer. For awhile just my day to day routine was keeping my lips above choppy water allowing me to breathe, the rest of me was lost in an inescapable, numbing depression. After a long timeless night I opened my eyes again and saw a beautiful but distilled sunrise, of pink, orange, white... Then more colors came in expanding blues and greens. Then the paints of the world took shape, I saw land, grass, roads, buildings, and people. Then a realization hit me; this is art, this is beauty. All so quickly I had an intermediary to carry me through; I started developing my new life on the mainland. I found friends, I found the love of my family, I was presented with knowledge, and I developed a goal as my new life was forming. I will assist others in finding the beauty in life and repay art for giving me a path.
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