Undergraduate / My personal quality - Curiosity. [4]

After, I would begin reading about their traditions and cultures. The way their cultures differed from mine was what interested me the most.
Who's "traditions and cultures?" Chinese, right? Mention that beforehand. Give a little more detail about the project. Detailed experiences are good too.

This is very good! I love how your curiosity is so hunger for knowledge. I also liked how you ended your essay. Clever.

Undergraduate / Pursuing medicine and experience with tsunami- UC Transfer Prompt [4]

My undergraduate course, majoring in microbiology, led to my understanding of small living organisms, such as the existence of bacteria in human body that can course human sufferings.

This is the smallest forms of life ever known to humankind. The study of the science of microbiology is part of pre-med program.
Remove. We already know that.

Talk about how you gained the passion of helping and healing others. Everyone has a passion of helping people in their own way, but the colleges want diversity and you can give it to them by telling them your story!

In a nutshell, medicine, as I understood, it encompasses a variety of health care practices, health by prevention and treatment to illness.

I love your passion for helping others! I hope you get in! (:

Undergraduate / UC Prompt #2: My own war [13]

This is just my own opinion, but I don't think you should use the word "fuck." Colleges may find it offensive and immature. I see this more as a rant essay than a "Look at me and how special I am!" essay.

And quotations aren't suggested, as you are only putting YOUR thoughts and reasons, not what someone else said.

This experience is really strong, but it doesn't really relate with what you want to do in the future and why the UCs should accept you. Not to be mean, but everyone is going through a "me vs the world" battle.

Maybe you can talk about what you're going to major in and say how that made you become the person you are today.