TarlGis
Mar 23, 2012
Scholarship / Essay for an internship application (things about me / good fit / dream job / ads) [4]
yes, thank you for your help with English grammar. :)
yes, thank you for your help with English grammar. :)
TarlGis
Mar 22, 2012
Scholarship / Essay for an internship application (things about me / good fit / dream job / ads) [4]
Hi EF_ Team,
I am applying for an internship program at an advertising agency and I am supposed to answer some questions. Could you please do me a favor with my English grammar and proofreading because English is not my first language and I would like it to be correct and formal for this internship application. Thank you so much.
- Th
Here is my answers for some questions.
4. What is one thing we absolutely need to know about you? Feel free to have some fun with this answer.
*512 Max Characters
I bring a camera with me more than my purse. I am not that kind of professional photographer, but I absolutely bring a camera every time I go out, that could be a cellphone camera, point-and-shoot camera or DSLR camera. For me, that is because missing a precious and fun moment is worse than losing amount of money or spending a fortune on valuable stuff.
5. Why do you think you'd be a good fit for Mullen?
I think I would be a good fit for Mullen because I find some qualities of mine in common with Mullen. I have a strong passion and interest for what I work and try my hardest to make it perfect no matter what difficulties there are. I have always considered challenges as the opportunities for me to improve myself and my work, and those challenges are to help me on the way to make my work greater. In addition, I hardly ever find myself satisfied with the imperfect work, this keeps me working and working harder until I am completely satisfied with what I have done and only great work can make me smile. Moreover, I have always viewed myself as a creative solution seeker. This means that I try my best to keep me creative in solving any issue with all of what I have got such as my skills and my thinking.
6. What is your dream job and why?
My dream job is to be a very good art director. I guess that is partly because most of the art directors and creative directors working in the advertising industry inspire me a lot and I love to work in this interesting industry and with those interesting people who are like-minded, partly because I like to do the creative work and like the way how people think and come up with creative solutions for the issues to help the clients gain success in their business.
In addition, I love to get a brief and then I really enjoy the moment I brainstorm unique ideas, subsequently, I find the ways of idea execution to bring my ideas to life. It is really an amazing work process that I can find in the art director position.
7. What is your favorite advertising campaign and why?
One of my favorite advertising campaigns is "Be Stupid" advertising campaign by Anomaly for the international jeans brand Diesel. The first reason that I love this campaign is its big idea with a very profound philosophy behind it. It strikes a chord in everybody for sure and it gets them thinking about the question "why can we not be stupid while there's nothing wrong with it?". "Be stupid" is the way we can be ourselves without being afraid of anything. We are not afraid of taking risks or not afraid of failure because there are worse things than failure, like even not giving it a try. When we are stupid, we are free to do what we love and it is just because we do not care about fear, rules, conformity or control. That is when we live our lives at the best.
The idea of this campaign is the most strongly conveyed through each of the headlines and the taglines, encouraging us how stupidity is a wonderful thing. I could not agree more. The visuals work very well with the headline and tagline with the purpose of making the idea stronger and stronger in consumers' minds.
In addition, this campaign is executed with many media such as online, press and outdoor advertisements to spread its philosophy. Those media are extremely effective and the budget spent on those media is not really expensive. That is also the reason why an advertising campaign can work well with a small budget.
Above all, the idea with its philosophy behind this campaign seems to fit well with Diesel's image of rebellion.
Hi EF_ Team,
I am applying for an internship program at an advertising agency and I am supposed to answer some questions. Could you please do me a favor with my English grammar and proofreading because English is not my first language and I would like it to be correct and formal for this internship application. Thank you so much.
- Th
Here is my answers for some questions.
4. What is one thing we absolutely need to know about you? Feel free to have some fun with this answer.
*512 Max Characters
I bring a camera with me more than my purse. I am not that kind of professional photographer, but I absolutely bring a camera every time I go out, that could be a cellphone camera, point-and-shoot camera or DSLR camera. For me, that is because missing a precious and fun moment is worse than losing amount of money or spending a fortune on valuable stuff.
5. Why do you think you'd be a good fit for Mullen?
I think I would be a good fit for Mullen because I find some qualities of mine in common with Mullen. I have a strong passion and interest for what I work and try my hardest to make it perfect no matter what difficulties there are. I have always considered challenges as the opportunities for me to improve myself and my work, and those challenges are to help me on the way to make my work greater. In addition, I hardly ever find myself satisfied with the imperfect work, this keeps me working and working harder until I am completely satisfied with what I have done and only great work can make me smile. Moreover, I have always viewed myself as a creative solution seeker. This means that I try my best to keep me creative in solving any issue with all of what I have got such as my skills and my thinking.
6. What is your dream job and why?
My dream job is to be a very good art director. I guess that is partly because most of the art directors and creative directors working in the advertising industry inspire me a lot and I love to work in this interesting industry and with those interesting people who are like-minded, partly because I like to do the creative work and like the way how people think and come up with creative solutions for the issues to help the clients gain success in their business.
In addition, I love to get a brief and then I really enjoy the moment I brainstorm unique ideas, subsequently, I find the ways of idea execution to bring my ideas to life. It is really an amazing work process that I can find in the art director position.
7. What is your favorite advertising campaign and why?
One of my favorite advertising campaigns is "Be Stupid" advertising campaign by Anomaly for the international jeans brand Diesel. The first reason that I love this campaign is its big idea with a very profound philosophy behind it. It strikes a chord in everybody for sure and it gets them thinking about the question "why can we not be stupid while there's nothing wrong with it?". "Be stupid" is the way we can be ourselves without being afraid of anything. We are not afraid of taking risks or not afraid of failure because there are worse things than failure, like even not giving it a try. When we are stupid, we are free to do what we love and it is just because we do not care about fear, rules, conformity or control. That is when we live our lives at the best.
The idea of this campaign is the most strongly conveyed through each of the headlines and the taglines, encouraging us how stupidity is a wonderful thing. I could not agree more. The visuals work very well with the headline and tagline with the purpose of making the idea stronger and stronger in consumers' minds.
In addition, this campaign is executed with many media such as online, press and outdoor advertisements to spread its philosophy. Those media are extremely effective and the budget spent on those media is not really expensive. That is also the reason why an advertising campaign can work well with a small budget.
Above all, the idea with its philosophy behind this campaign seems to fit well with Diesel's image of rebellion.
TarlGis
Mar 22, 2012
Speeches / How to write a speech about life outside school? [2]
Hi Francis,
It would be great if you can write your essay first and then post it here so that everybody can give you the feedbacks. As an art student, my classmates and I are usually given advice by our instructor that we should work for what we love rather than money at the early stage of career, and we are artists, as a result, we don't care much about money, we build and work for what we love. I hope you can give final year students something that inspire and courage them to work hard and work for something that they are really interested in and passionate about it.
I hope it helps.
- Th
Hi Francis,
It would be great if you can write your essay first and then post it here so that everybody can give you the feedbacks. As an art student, my classmates and I are usually given advice by our instructor that we should work for what we love rather than money at the early stage of career, and we are artists, as a result, we don't care much about money, we build and work for what we love. I hope you can give final year students something that inspire and courage them to work hard and work for something that they are really interested in and passionate about it.
I hope it helps.
- Th
TarlGis
Mar 22, 2012
Undergraduate / 'distant education' - applying for a degree at university [4]
Hi meand studying,
The topic of the essay about distant education for school application seems interesting to me, and I love the reason that you mentioned about why you choose it. However, according to me, the essay that you wrote is kind of short and it lacks many convincing reasons for the application to the university. It would be great if you have a very clear structure for the essay such as introduction, body and conclusion. Then in the body of the essay, you can list out 3 main persuadable reasons why distant education is much better than on campus education. In the essay that you wrote, it seems to me that you only pointed out one reason of how distant education can save your time with convenience of the internet and you can discuss with other people through forums, to me I said those reasons are not enough persuadable because you can learn it that way by yourself and it's not necessary for you to apply for a school.
My recommendations are that you can write more (give more reasons) to make your essay longer and more convincible. You can say how distant education are better than on campus education, with the reasons you mentioned above, you can explain more and add more details to make them better.
i hope it helps.
- Th
Hi meand studying,
The topic of the essay about distant education for school application seems interesting to me, and I love the reason that you mentioned about why you choose it. However, according to me, the essay that you wrote is kind of short and it lacks many convincing reasons for the application to the university. It would be great if you have a very clear structure for the essay such as introduction, body and conclusion. Then in the body of the essay, you can list out 3 main persuadable reasons why distant education is much better than on campus education. In the essay that you wrote, it seems to me that you only pointed out one reason of how distant education can save your time with convenience of the internet and you can discuss with other people through forums, to me I said those reasons are not enough persuadable because you can learn it that way by yourself and it's not necessary for you to apply for a school.
My recommendations are that you can write more (give more reasons) to make your essay longer and more convincible. You can say how distant education are better than on campus education, with the reasons you mentioned above, you can explain more and add more details to make them better.
i hope it helps.
- Th
TarlGis
Nov 20, 2008
Graduate / Master in Advertising - my true passion and my hard-working spirit is strong enough [NEW]
I am very grateful for your help on my essay - regarding structure, grammar and spelling etc.
Requirement: A one-page statement of your goals in graduate school
- Your education background and commitment. Brief.
- Your career goal or your thesis project and industry objectives. Be specific. Mention the field that you want to pursue and accomplish.
Thank you very much for your help. Below is my essay
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Some people usually switch to another channel when commercial advertising is appearing on television while others cannot take their eyes of advertising on television or creative slogans or posters on the streets. It can be considered that I am the person who belongs to the second group of people, always having a strong interest in advertising related things as long as creative ideas presented in every advertising.
The first time I realized my true passion in advertising field is when I watched a Tiger beer ad "The Quest" on the television. It was so impressive that I could not stop wondering how they came up with such creative ideas for a television commercial advertising. After that, I was actually attracted by creative ideas of television commercial or print ads. That was the time when I actually knew what I want to do for my future career.
However, as a person graduating from AAAAAA University with Bachelor Degree of Commerce and working for BBBBBB Bank for one year, I seem not to have much formal education background about advertising. As a result, I want to apply to CCCCC University for my graduate study, majoring in Advertising and emphasizing in Art Direction. In order to pursue my true passion for future career goals, I actually want to complete graduate program successfully with goals I set out for my graduate study at this school. One of the most important goals that I want to gain is creative thinking and concept development skills for advertising because they are a very important part for an advertiser to come up with creative and impressive ideas. Moreover, I am very interested in thinking of creative ideas for advertising, therefore it can be said that gaining those skills is my priority goal and I will do my best to achieve that goal when I have a chance of studying graduate program. My second goal for the graduate study is to master digital graphics and copywriting skills. I actually think that these skills are important and integral in supporting for creative ideas presented in print and commercial ads. Once an idea is come up with, how it is presented and the slogan is used will have huge impact on the advertising. As a result, I really want to gain this goal in order that it can perfect ideas for advertising. Finally, the goal, which I want to achieve, is the sharing of advertising knowledge and skills. I know that there are a lot of things I need to learn from classmates and professors as well as what I want to share. "Knowledge is only useful when it is shared among people". Consequently, I hope I will gain knowledge and experience better through discussions and sharing of everybody about advertising lessons taught and everybody's understanding and experiences in the class so that it can help me sharpen my knowledge and what I have learned in the class.
I know there will be many hardships on the way of gaining my goals but I believe that my true passion in advertising field as well as my hard-working spirit is strong enough to help me overcome those hardships and I have also been prepared for challenges and responsibilities ahead. I am completely confident that now is the right time for to pursue my true passion for career goals and the master's degree that I will receive after having completed the graduate study will allow me to work professionally in the field in which I have strong interest for my future career.
I am very grateful for your help on my essay - regarding structure, grammar and spelling etc.
Requirement: A one-page statement of your goals in graduate school
- Your education background and commitment. Brief.
- Your career goal or your thesis project and industry objectives. Be specific. Mention the field that you want to pursue and accomplish.
Thank you very much for your help. Below is my essay
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Some people usually switch to another channel when commercial advertising is appearing on television while others cannot take their eyes of advertising on television or creative slogans or posters on the streets. It can be considered that I am the person who belongs to the second group of people, always having a strong interest in advertising related things as long as creative ideas presented in every advertising.
The first time I realized my true passion in advertising field is when I watched a Tiger beer ad "The Quest" on the television. It was so impressive that I could not stop wondering how they came up with such creative ideas for a television commercial advertising. After that, I was actually attracted by creative ideas of television commercial or print ads. That was the time when I actually knew what I want to do for my future career.
However, as a person graduating from AAAAAA University with Bachelor Degree of Commerce and working for BBBBBB Bank for one year, I seem not to have much formal education background about advertising. As a result, I want to apply to CCCCC University for my graduate study, majoring in Advertising and emphasizing in Art Direction. In order to pursue my true passion for future career goals, I actually want to complete graduate program successfully with goals I set out for my graduate study at this school. One of the most important goals that I want to gain is creative thinking and concept development skills for advertising because they are a very important part for an advertiser to come up with creative and impressive ideas. Moreover, I am very interested in thinking of creative ideas for advertising, therefore it can be said that gaining those skills is my priority goal and I will do my best to achieve that goal when I have a chance of studying graduate program. My second goal for the graduate study is to master digital graphics and copywriting skills. I actually think that these skills are important and integral in supporting for creative ideas presented in print and commercial ads. Once an idea is come up with, how it is presented and the slogan is used will have huge impact on the advertising. As a result, I really want to gain this goal in order that it can perfect ideas for advertising. Finally, the goal, which I want to achieve, is the sharing of advertising knowledge and skills. I know that there are a lot of things I need to learn from classmates and professors as well as what I want to share. "Knowledge is only useful when it is shared among people". Consequently, I hope I will gain knowledge and experience better through discussions and sharing of everybody about advertising lessons taught and everybody's understanding and experiences in the class so that it can help me sharpen my knowledge and what I have learned in the class.
I know there will be many hardships on the way of gaining my goals but I believe that my true passion in advertising field as well as my hard-working spirit is strong enough to help me overcome those hardships and I have also been prepared for challenges and responsibilities ahead. I am completely confident that now is the right time for to pursue my true passion for career goals and the master's degree that I will receive after having completed the graduate study will allow me to work professionally in the field in which I have strong interest for my future career.
