Undergraduate / Short essay response - Extracurricular Activity - "My Beautiful Windows" [5]

It is absolutely well written! But I didn't get what extra curricular activity or work experience you described in this short essay. It would be good if you could explicitly write about the activity you're writing about.

Undergraduate / 'tennis was not just a sport to me' - self-confidence and sense of self through UC [4]

Well, personally I think it doesn't not answer the prompt. Where in the prompt it asks you to give your background of your family, school and community, you have concentrated on one of your skills. Also, there is more emphasis on the match and not how it influenced you. It would be better if you would emphasize more on the effect of the match on you than the match itself. I hope that helps! :)

Undergraduate / What's between living and dreaming? - columbia essay [5]

Your essay seems good but I think you should make it more personal as stated above. Also, I think the word "dream" is repeated quite often in the third paragraph. Could you put in some other word instead of dream or rephrase the sentences?


Also, I think it should be dreaming instead of dream. i might be wrong though. Good luck :)