Posts by Gjidodaj
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Last Post: Dec 11, 2011
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Undergraduate /
Any costume i like---Brandeis Supplement [7]
Really good! It was fun and I found a few grammatical errors but nothing major. I found that reading essays backwards (I know, I know it's weird) helps with errors because it helps you focus on the words individually so for instance if you spelt something wrong or whatever, you'll notice it more than if you read it normally. And yes your message does come across in the end.
Undergraduate /
"And the new Vice President is..." - COMMON APP PARAGRAPH [5]
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below max (1000 characters):
This is what I wrote (955 characters):
"And the new Vice President is..." I looked around, closed my eyes, and crossed my fingers. Four years prior, I was looking for something that I could participate in after school. I thought of joining Interact Club, however my friends did not approve. They tried to convince me not to join and had said it would be a waste of time. Contrary to what they thought I should do, I joined the beginning of my freshmen year. I was surprised to find Interact Club was nothing as they had portrayed. From organizing the schools blood drive to collecting coats and canned goods for people who need it most, everything that was done was for the benefit of others. One of the greatest honors I received in Interact was the moment I heard my own name called aloud for the Vice President position. I first joined Interact to simply have something productive to but I soon discovered a passion for helping others and I'm grateful for what we have accomplished for others.
Any grammatical errors? Any other way to spice it up or anything I should add? please help
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