Undergraduate / "A Conflict of Nations" - UC Prompt 2. Need help revise!! [3]

Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

"A Conflict of Nations", was the title of a power point project that my group had submitted to my teacher for 10th grade to receive honors credit in my modern world course. Being the one in charge of this project was not an easy task, having to lead the group and interacting with each other. I was the one who had to present it to my teacher and explain to him about the details of the events that occurred during that period. The teacher was impressed with our work, which he saved it onto his computer for future uses to lecture his class.

Given a time period of one week to complete this difficult assignment, my group mates and I were each responsible for a portion of the project. As being the leader for the group, I knew there was no room for errors and mistakes. Everyday within the week, I spoke with my group mates, assuring that they were on task, and asking them if they had difficulties and request help if needed. By reminding them the due date and how important this project is, everyone was motivated and began to put more effort into it. Every night, I called each individual to check on their process upon their section of their work. By the end of the week, everyone had submitted their portion of the work to me to assemble the project together.

After receiving everyone's work, I spent sometime myself to ensure the information was accurate and correct. By devoting tremendous amount of time researching, I was able to include more details onto the project. After finalizing the project, I was unable to understand the context due to the complexity of the text written. Only through reading the details carefully word by word was I able to interpret the data and practiced explaining each fact precisely. Meeting up with my group mates on the last day of the week at the library, we glanced at our project and there, I gave an explanation to each slide within the power point. My group mates were amazed and astounded by the accomplishment I had done.

The following day, I presented the project to my teacher with awe. By explaining each slide and describing the events happened to my teacher, he was amazed. After my presentation, he saved our project onto his computer and used it for his future lectures.

With this experience, I became more social and interested in becoming the leader. Being a leader has given me the potential of managing difficulties and organizing the materials. With our careful planning and time devoted to this project, it became an overall success for everyone.

Undergraduate / August 1998, America. UC Prompt 1 Need help revise. [2]

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On a day of August 1998, my family and I placed our first step onto America. I knew that the moment would be the beginning of a new life, the start of an American dream. Unfortunately, the new environment and challenges that my family encountered did not make the American dream come true; but even worse, turned into a nightmare and brought us apart. Over the years as I grew up, being left isolated at home and worried about the future, I witnessed my family's hardship as my mother worked endless hours to support me and my brother and our education. The difficult time and experience has shaped my determination to develop to an educated and successful person, repaying what my mother has given and done for me, and to become an educator to help students who share similar disadvantageous experience in their pursuit of education.

I can remember the time when my family immigrated to the United States from Hong Kong. Within our first few months in the US, my family started to have conflicts and arguments that we were unable to settle, and my father deserted the family. Without his financial support, my mother had difficulty of supporting both my brother and me. From early morning to late evening, my mother devoted all her time working, trying to earn enough for the family. While my brother was in college concentrating on his study, I was left isolated at home without much help when I had questions from learning. Moreover, because my primary language was not English, I first found it very difficult to adapt to school in America. I was incapable of fully understanding what my teachers taught in classes, causing me to feel segregated from the classmates. After being empowered by what my mother has given me, I was urged to overcome this burden. Through this difficulty, I was able to pursue a further education and become successful.

By expanding my knowledge, I can develop my reasoning skills as becoming an educator to provide students a better understanding of their family concerns. With my bilingual abilities, I can communicate clearly to both Chinese and American people, allowing me to be twice as effective, to interact with the natives born here and the new arrival immigrants. As an educator, tutoring pupils after school enables them to receive help when needed and giving advice to students who shares similar background as me.

As an immigrant, coming to a new country caused my family to fall apart. After this incident, my mother's burden increased, having to work longer hours to pay for the family's expense. This difficult experience of my mother's has caused me to realize her pain and motivated me to become an educated and successful person.