Undergraduate / (never one for change) essay#1 and (study buddy) BU roommate [4]

I'm looking for a lot of advice and any catches in spelling or grammatical errors. I looked through both essays twice, but I sometimes miss things when I view my own work.

I'll be happy to read your own work, if you ask!

Thank you,
Samone

Common App Essay
Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

I was never one for change, unless it had been planned. I had my path planned out. Birth, grade school, high school, college, military, family, die of natural causes. That was the plan, in that order. I was convinced that if I did everything right, I would never have any need to stray from that plan. Unfortunately, as high school ends, reality hits hard, and so does the economy. I don't have money to pay for college. So when a Naval recruiter called me asking me what my plans for the future were, the Navy seemed like a perfect fit and a small price to pay for college. [..]

BU Roommate Essay
It is three weeks before the start of your freshman year at BU, and you are talking to your new roommate for the first time. Since you are trying to get to know each other, what are a few things you would want to share about who you are?

Dear roomie,
Only three weeks to go and we'll both be shelling out hours of studying in our dorm. I hope that I can eliminate some awkwardness during that period with this letter to you, so you can have an idea of who I am, maybe let it sink in a bit. I cannot wait until we actually meet, but until then, take a little reference from this letter.

There are three very important things you should know about me.

Thanks for reviewing these. I really need Boston. I got a full ride Navy ROTC scholarship and its one of my few chances of attending college.

Thanks again :)