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'An anything but ordinary college' - Oberlin College Supplement Help [3]
I spent my every moment obsessing over the college as if some dormant symbiotic relationship had awakened.
i spent my every moment doesnt work. make it "i spent every moment i could" or "i spent all the time i could"
I tried to immerse myself in all that is Oberlin, yet I hungered for more. I wanted to experience it firsthand, but it was beyond my grasp. I wanted to be an Obie.
here after the oberlin, i think its better to make it - " but despite all my investigations, I remained hungry for more." and then finally change the wanted to want and make it "i want to be an Obie."
I know this is late, but its on time if you are applying RD and you have not given any indication so i thought i could help.