Undergraduate / 'found a job at a local store' - essay [8]

I agree with above posters, conclusion has to be stronger. Find something that other people will not be writing about for a conclusion

Undergraduate / "Shadows"- work experience, will review your essays [11]

Good essay. Like the post above, I think you talk more about the impact it had. It seems a little bit shallow at this point.

Undergraduate / Internship programs, Why Boston essay, International student body [4]

My biggest concern about this essay is the lack of focus. You mentioned alot of things that you liked about the school. To me, there is a like of depth. Is there one thing in particular that you liked? I really think you should just focus on one thing