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teddyerock   
Jan 13, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Visiting Australia' - Unique interests/talents - Bucknell [2]

The following questions are your opportunity to demonstrate, within the context of the Common Application, what makes you uncommon and uniquely you. In your responses, be bold and have some fun - really! Tell us about your talents and interests so that we can know the "you" behind the transcripts.

What are the three most important things Bucknell's faculty and students should know about you? (up to 200 words each)

Visiting Australia has been a dream of mine, since the second grade. Unlike most, I am not interested in the beaches or the accents. I am drawn in by the unique diversity of their wildlife. My curiosity stems from a research project that I completed in elementary school. I was supposed to investigate my ethnicity, but lucky for me my school didn't have any books on Poland. Somehow I ended up with a book on Australia. Within the pages, I discovered pictures of the strangest creatures that I had ever seen. It wasn't the usual animals, like koalas and kangaroos, that caught my eye. The emu, Tasmanian devil, and wombat stuck out to me as these cute, yet odd creatures. As I have grown older, I learn more, and continue to be intrigued by the country. Yet, now I know of other places that are also as unique as Australia. I have subconsciously created a list of places I want to visit, which covers most of the world. Although my list is constantly increasing, Australia is still my top priority of where to explore first.

I am one of the three percent of the nation affected by a typically unfamiliar skin disease. Eczema may seem insignificant, but it plays a huge role in my life. My skin cracks, itches, burns, and bleeds uncontrollably. As sweat drips into the cracks, I'd like nothing better than to rip my face off and make the pain disappear. I've spent my whole life pining for an unknown cure. Although I'd get rid my eczema if given the chance, I don't let it slow me down. I can run, jump, and dive as well as anyone else. It takes a little extra effort to stick it out the pain, but I don't mind the hard work. I love what I play, and working hard is something I'm accustomed to. I wear skirts if I want to, regardless of how cut up my legs may be. My disease doesn't control me.

On the second one, my friend thinks I am being too harsh. let me know what you think or about any of my errors.
Also I still need to finish my third, but am not sure what to write about.Should I balance myself out with my musically interests (my application reflects me as very athletic) or should I talk about my love for swimming and loyality to a day camp that i grew up at.
teddyerock   
Jan 13, 2012
Undergraduate / (We'll meet in Italy / Academics) - Colgate supplemental [5]

Your story was a great way to start off answering the firs question.

I wouldn't say "Staying far away from home, I may easily get homesick." Instead talk about how their strong Vietnamese community will prevent you from getting homesick. instead of saying "In addition, I want to contribute to this club in order to introduce Vietnam to my foreign friends." talk about how you look forward joining this club and introducing your culture to Americans (or whoever).
teddyerock   
Jan 11, 2012
Undergraduate / Why are you a good fit? Union and American Questions [3]

At Union, a liberal arts education includes interdisciplinary study, undergraduate research, opportunities for international study and involvement in Minerva Houses. Why is Union a good fit for you? (250 words)

Union College is a place I could call home for the next four years of my life. Coming from New Jersey, New York is only miles away. Therefore, I am completely comfortable with the surroundings of the college. The atmosphere of campus makes me feel safe, and gives me a sense of belonging. I come from a graduating class of 170. The small size of Union makes it the perfect school to transition into. It has that familiar aspect of only having around 20 students in a class. I not only interested in the layout of campus; Union is an excellent place to study. If I am accepted to Union, I look forward to taking full advantage of undergraduate research. Today, employers want to see that extra effort outside the classroom. I am the type of person that is going to work hard to achieve that recognition. Union also allows my dream of studying ecological research in Australia to come true. With all my efforts in research at Union, any employer would be happy to hire me.

Do you KNOW AU? In 75 to 150 words, tell us why you are interested in American University and why you would be a good fit for our community.

I am interested in being part of the diverse student body of American. Countries and cultures are so distinctive. I would really like to visit lots of places, but meeting people from different places would give me the opportunity to learn more before I go. At the same time, American is not so hugely diverse. What I mean is American is the size school that I desire. I do not want to go to a school so big that I am lost in a sea of names and faces. I yearn to be part of American student in Washington D.C., where I could easily manage the city lifestyle and still accomplish my academic goals. There, I hope to join clubs that are eager to help the community and the environment.

I'm not sure these flow right. Corrections and advise are welcome.
teddyerock   
Jan 11, 2012
Undergraduate / 'top-notch education for an affordable tuition' - Why this University [4]

University of X offers a top-notch education for an affordable tuition, even for out-of-state students. It has a renowned engineering department and a low student-faculty ratio, which is dedicated to improving intellectual development of the students through more personalized education.

You could change which to that; I think it makes it flow a little more. Just a suggestion. If you change which to that, you no longer need the comma.

Otherwise it is good, short, and sweet.
teddyerock   
Jan 10, 2012
Undergraduate / 'a passion for animals and nature' - Bucknell Major Explaination [2]

Explain why you are interested in this major:

I have always had a passion for animals and nature. As a kindergartner, I believed the ideal job for me was a vet. My childhood dreams of veterinary medicine were crush by my inability to stomach the insides of animals. I realized I don't want to go that in-depth on animals. This is my first year dabbling in Environmental Studies, and I absolutely love the combination. I have seen a glimpse of how humans are destroying the planet. I realized that we taking crucial species from biomes, and keeping them as house pets. I really want to take part in sustaining Earth, so that all species enjoy the planet for many years to come.

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