Writing Feedback / 'Educated high-school students with bright and independent mind' - Toefl essay [NEW]

Topic- High school should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. Agree or disagree?
High school is the time when you decide your future career and particular field you want to concentrate and interested in. In my opinion high school should permit students to choose courses they want for several reasons which are freedom of choice, to have progress in students grades and knowledge as well as to help students explore their aptitude.

First of all, as I mentioned above students should have a right to choose what they want to study. Not allowing students their desired subjects to be chosen is a restriction of human rights. As children of independent country we should know our rights and opportunities we have in order to achieve our goals and dreams.

Next, Students should choose their classes to have progress in their studies and grades. Also, we can avoid conflicts among students and teachers which can be enjoyable and productive for both instructor and students. For example, when I was taking art class everyone shared the same interests and it was easy to understand each other. Giving chance students to choose their interested fields of study is merit.

Lastly, the most important reason I support this idea is he or she can explore in an area she/he has an aptitude. When schools can give such kind of opportunity the students are likely do their best and succeed in their future lives which is one of the point most people get education. Furthermore, this type of opportunities can raise future geniuses.

In conclusion, as a young women I want my children to get knowledge they have desire to study in order to have distinguished achievement so it has advantage not only for him or her but for society as well. Having three reasons helps us to bring up students who are well-educated, with a bright and independent mind.

Writing Feedback / 'learn to develop good characteristics in ourselves' - TOEFL [9]

We all work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion,what are some important characteristics of a co-worker? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why these characteristics are important.

We all study and do our best at school, university so to get a good education. Also, to get a successful job in the future. While working with other people in our community we learn many things and value our relationship with them. In my opinion, co-workers should have qualities like honesty, being adept in her or his job as well as being always ready to give a hand in need.

Firstly, as people say honesty is the best policy. If you work with honest people and who can criticize you and can tell you your weak points would be benefit for both agency and employee at the same time.

Secondly, working with people who are masters in their field or job is always advantage. It raises competition among co-workers and of course it will lead to success and improvement in a company or institution.

Thirdly, having a co-worker who is helpful and the person whom you can always count on in your bad times is merit. Because nobody is perfect and we all have problems in our live. For example, there can be times when you are sick or the members of your family and here can be your collaborator who can help you out in your hard times.

In conclusion, we should learn to develop good characteristics in ourselves so it would be easy and delightful working with our co-workers. The characteristics which I mentioned above would be appreciated by many people who collaborate with each other every day.

Writing Feedback / 'classes should be mandatory' - students should be required to attend classes.... [7]

Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

People attend University for many reasons. For example, new experience, to increase knowledge, career preparation and etc.

First of all, when students present at lecture or class they can get more knowledge. To be more precisely, the lecture which is instructed by professor is valuable. For instance, when I took "peoples of Africa" class our professor shared with his experience and it was so interesting and motivated a lot of students to learn more about this region. Albeit, our professor gave us a chance to go to fill trips I am sure which a life-long memory.

Second of all, compulsory classes allow students to develop their social and communication skills. For example, studying in a team-work will help students to cooperate with the other students. Also, it gives opportunity to learn how to listen and respect others opinion .Furthermore, it would be a good chance to prepare students to their future career.

Last but not least, another reason that classes should be mandatory is to experience both motivation and competition source. While being required to attend classes you would be able to work with other students and for sure there will be competition among them. As result, it will lead to success and achievement of goals.

To sum up, having three reasons which are valuable knowledge, career preparation and rich experience allows me believe that attendance must be compulsory.

Writing Feedback / 'Childhood - being the loved one' - the happiest time [5]

Hey everyone. i wrote this essay with time limitation which is 30 minutes. Please, feel free to read and leave your comments!!! thank you:)

When you ask people a question in what time do you want to go back and the answer would be childhood. Childhood is the time when you mostly enjoy your life. I totally agree with the given statement. I believe that this time of life is the most precious and sweet moments of every person in this world. First of all, it is the time when people are not obligated or responsible for someone or something which gives us pressure. For example, my childhood was about playing with my friends, traveling and going to entertainment places and enjoying my life as much as possible for what i am thankful for my parents. Second of all, i am sure that it is the time when you mostly feel the love and care of relatives and people. In my country we have a proverb which says that "Till the age of 10 the child is prince or princes and everyone should love and take care of them properly". Kids are always respected members and considered as an happiness of our life. Third of all, i can say that it is also time when you believe in magic like Santa clause, elves, angels, princesses and etc. I remember that I was never as enthusiastic as writing a letter to Santa and this is one of my best moments in my life. I think that many people have such kind of moments from their childhood. In conclusion, i suppose that many people will agree with the considered reasons above. Time when you mostly laugh, explore new things and being the loved one is Childhood. It is a time when you believe in magic.