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Joined: Feb 13, 2012
Last Post: Feb 15, 2012
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H_H   
Feb 15, 2012
Writing Feedback / Should we have to always pay attention to the opinions from celebrities? [5]

Hi Goku123,
In my opinion, your English is quite good. . Howver, I'm much concerned if your essay addressed the question correctly. As far as I understand, the question is "whether we should pay attention to...", which doesn't mean "whether we should trust...". Therefore, your first paragaraph seems not to provide good examples and specific reason. Even if the celebrities' opinions are not true, we still have to pay attend to them since the untrue opinions can give negative impacts to a large number of their fans, which can lead them application of bad living styles or behaviors.

What do you think Goku?
H_H   
Feb 15, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'better to marry a similar partner' - TOEFL [5]

Thanks Goku123,
I do appreciate your comment and encouragement. your point on my mistake is correct. You have a good observation :) Let's practice then!
H_H   
Feb 14, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'better to marry a similar partner' - TOEFL [5]

Dear all,
I would appreciate if you could give your critical comments to improve it. Thank you very much.

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Even though many people believe at the proverb of "marriage is fate", the concern on the similarity or difference of the two partners is commonly raised at the time when ones think of entering marriage life. From my own view and experience, I think that marrying a person similar to you would build successful long-term relationships as it helps avoid conflicts, and it creates more funs while enjoying and sharing the same hobbies.

First of all, conflicts about everything between two individuals who have just finished the freedoms of single lives popularly occurs during the several initial years of marriage, Similar couples often have fewer arguments than the different ones. Taking an anniversary as an example, it is easy for the couple who have similar characteristics to decide to organize their event at home or in a restaurant, with friends or not. If they are different, let us say the wife is an out-going person and the husband is not, quarrels can obviously induce even with this simple discussion. Therefore, with abundance of more serious issues in family life such as building a house, managing the family finance and expenditure or educating children etc, the similarity of couple is a crucial factor to help them to reach quick decisions satisfying both sides, which contributes to maintain happy life.

Second, the similar nature could magnify various activities of common interest for couples to facilitate their joyful life. If both have the same hobby of watching films rather than news, they could share evening time together after dinners. This evidently attributes to their feelings of being closer to each other as well as understanding each other better after watching and discussing situations in the movies imitated those in reality. In contrast, the different traits between husband and wife could form accumulated uncomfortable sensations that erode their amour emotion, leading to the ruin of the marriage. For example, I have a close friend who divorced his wife in 3 years after their wedding date. One of the main causes that led to their separation is the different hobbies. At first glance, they found each other very attractive via their different hobbies. After a period of time living together, the spiritual distance between them increased. They could hardly talk to each other during spare time since each one had his/her own hobbies. Moreover, it was too challenging for them to find some topics that interested both due to each own differentiations. In addition, according to the annual report of Population and Family Central Committee of Hanoi - the capital of Vietnam,, a large proportion of the couples who submitted divorce petitions to the district civil courts stated that the main reason is that they are too different to accept the other partner's behaviors and lifestyles.

To conclude, it appears that for the sake of long-term happy life, someone should marry a similar partner rather than a spouse who holds different temperaments from his/hers. This character will secure the couple's common interests and hobbies. However, if you have a spouse different from you, you should try to minimize this gap in some ways.
H_H   
Feb 14, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'living in a higher pace is better' - TOEFL practice 59 [4]

Admittedly, on the other hand, there might be some people proclaiming that with a slower pace they can enjoy their lives more because it is not necessary for them to notice the time control or acquire the fame of succeedsuccess
H_H   
Feb 13, 2012
Scholarship / "Me, my career and my goals" essay - International Scholarship [4]

I was born in the capital city of Austria, Vienna, to a wonderful family of 9 people:M my parents andwith us, seven children. We have hopefully not only many problems but also a lot of fun. My father works as a director of a Non Goverment Organization ( NGO) and my mother as a nurse, while we, children, study universities, secondary schools, or elementary Schools .

During my first years in the Elementary School with extended language teaching I got excited about English. I liked the way our teacher provided us songs, and games in English,.bB ut mainly I remember how my father took serious concern about supervising how we understoodunderstand this language., thatThe point that he did not really care about any other classes made me work hard. I needed to live a decade more to understand how important was his approach was . My excitement about helping people and nursing leadled me to choose attend Secondary Church School for Nurses. After four years I gladly finished it with a diploma.

There is one important reality I did not mention yet. I love Abalone. My father thinks that Abalone is a great game that gives you the basic ideas about world and that is why he taught hisour whole family how to play it. I started to play when I was about five years old and I still do. Even though my father never meant any of us to play Abalone on such a high level, we were improving a lot and currently we are one of the best players in our country. In 2008 I was the European Champion in 2008 and a year before a Vice- World Champion in 2007 . Beside Abalone I love sport. I like tennis, ping-pong, ice-hockey and I used to play basketball for about ten years . Our team won a few medals, however these achievements cannot be so seriouslyascompared to the ones in Abalone.

During my free time, I like volunteering. I help the Charity of Prague their collections and projects. In 2009 I and my friends and I decided to work as volunteers during FIS no abbreviation World Championship that was held in our country. We enjoyed helping with these events and we were amazed by the cultural differences.

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Hi there,
I am running out of time so I could only correct some of the spelling and grammar mistake. In my view, it is more important that you should restructure your essay to describe your career path, goals and hobbies, that are relevant to the objectives of the scholarship. Your essay should answer the questions:

1. who are you? what is your career goal your ambitions?
2. to what extend the scholarship will attribute you to achieve your career goal and ambitions?
3. Why should they give you the scholarship?
4. What will you can create the impact if you receive the scholarship/
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I don't know exactly what the scholarship for, but something like those questions should be address. you should not write on what you are not clear about.

Hope it helps
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