Undergraduate / Why online education? undergraduate admission paragraph statement. [9]

Hi kimuratakuya,

thank you very much for ur suggestions, i appretiate it, please u dont have to apologize , that was very helpful,

sincerely

Undergraduate / Why online education? undergraduate admission paragraph statement. [9]

thank you very much kimuratakuya,

please can u give some suggestions,

the word length < 100

Undergraduate / 'Bad grades, ashamed' an incident which led you to challenge yourself academically [5]

thank you very much avenged7fold

Undergraduate / Why online education? undergraduate admission paragraph statement. [9]

asdasd, thank you very much

Scholarship / 'the opportunity to refuel my vehicle' financial aid in a college am now applying for [4]

I hope that helped a little, suggestions of native speakers would be much better

Grammar, Usage / 'Passionate about business studies' - correct sentence? [13]

Thank you very much, i appreciate it

Scholarship / 'the opportunity to refuel my vehicle' financial aid in a college am now applying for [4]

Hi Jonathan,

"..but unfortunately i didnt get it because they didn't have the money to get it for me.."

I suggest, to avoid repeating the same :"get it " -> "but unfortunately i didnt get it because they couldnt afford it (for me).."

also :"when I am given a financial aid/ I will be given a financial aid ..."

"..acquire the skills to become a software engineer, .."
"..in any possible aspect of life .."

I hope native speakers could help further

Grammar, Usage / 'Passionate about business studies' - correct sentence? [13]

Hi,

I know java, php, c/c++, .net , etc ..

please tell me about that crossed out text, a reason why i have to delete it,

thank you very much

Grammar, Usage / 'Passionate about business studies' - correct sentence? [13]

Thank you chalumeau,

what about the struck through line, do I have to change it ?

Grammar, Usage / 'Passionate about business studies' - correct sentence? [13]

Hello everyone ,

here is an essay of why I have selected a bachelor degree in computer science , please tell me what you think about it, thanks :

Since an early age, I've always been passionate about computers and their hardware and software architectures, how data are handled and transferred from the cpu to the memory and vice versa , and then stored in a disk drive , etc ...

I believe a computer science degree will provide me with theoretical as well as practical knowledge in programming, algorithms, operating systems, software engineering,

Obtaining a bachelor's degree is a necessary first step, as I am keen on performing graduate-level academic research in the near future.

Grammar, Usage / 'Passionate about business studies' - correct sentence? [13]

Thank you very much chalumeau, I appretiate it

Grammar, Usage / 'Passionate about business studies' - correct sentence? [13]

I have another question, thanks in advance,

is it correct to say this ? :

this bachelor degree will prepare me for graduate level courses and research, as I am keen to participate in some research projects

Grammar, Usage / 'Passionate about business studies' - correct sentence? [13]

thank you very much chalumeau