Writing Feedback / 'reading fictions is more pleasant' - essay for Toefl [NEW]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

There are many different opinions regarding hobbies. Some people would rather watch TV. However, in my view, reading fiction is more enjoyable than watching movies for the following reasons.

Firstly, fiction books pay more attention to details. In fact, we can know characters, places, and times of a novel very well during reading it. Most of the novels describe not only main characters but also other people in the novels, where each scene is happening. For example, after I read animal farms which is a story of Russian revolution, I could understand the leaders and different segments of the Russian people. However, a movie just gives us a very small review of its stories and characters.

Secondly, reading a novel is more convenient. Some novels have around 100 pages and readers cannot finish them in just one hour. Yet these people can continue to read their novels wherever they find free time such as in bus or trains. For example, I have started to read a novel since last week. I do not have enough time to read a novel in one day, so I usually read it when I am coming home from English class. In contrast, I cannot watch a complete movie because I can just sit in front of TV for 15 minutes and after that, I have to study.

Some people might argue that people enjoy watching TV when they know they can learn many things such as learning a language by watching movies. This point has some merits on the surface; however, movies are not a good idea to learn a language for beginners since characters in movies speak very fast and unclear for language learners. For these learners it is better to start by reading some novels which are more comprehensible and enjoyable.

To sum up, reading fictions is more pleasant because these books have more depth, are much easier to use, and more useful for language learners.

Writing Feedback / 'opinions regarding world culture' - essay for TOEFL [4]

[i] Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.[/i]

There are many different opinions regarding world culture. Some people think that all the countries in the world cannot have a single culture. However, in my view, a single modern culture is being created by modern technology for the following reasons.

Firstly, most of the countries have the same educational system based on technology. Teachers give topics to the students who should research on the internet to find data, and then students should type their research by using computer and even give a presentation by using PowerPoint. For example, students who are studying in Iran use the same software, Microsoft, to type their homework or have presentation compared to Canadian students.

Secondly, new technology has created some similar jobs all around the world. Computer technology is a growing job in most of the countries, and students are being encouraged to study in this field. For example, many immigrants in Canada who have the degree in computer technology fields can easily go to Canadian universities and find jobs with good salaries. This example shows that jobs that are related to technology are in demand in most of the countries.

Some people might argue that there are some cultures such as making foods which are unicq in each culture, and technology cannot affect them. This point has some merits on the surface; however, many countries such as Canada, the USA, and British have many restaurants which serve many foods form different countries and cultures. In fact, cooks can find many new food recipes easily on the Internet. For example, two days ago, I went to a Canadian restaurant, and I ate noodle, sushi, which are Chinese foods, and Greek salad.

To sum up, new technology has affected cultures of the world, and we can see many similarities in many cultures. In fact, new technology has influences on educational system, jobs and foods in the world.

Writing Feedback / 'neither gaining money and status nor learning something new' - about satisfaction [NEW]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Satisfaction
There are many different opinions regarding satisfaction. Some people think that people need some limited things to be satisfied. However, in my view, People always want to have something more for the following reasons.

Firstly, most of the people like to have more money and status. Some people who have good houses and cars want to work harder to buy a bigger and better houses and cars. In fact, these people think about making money even in their last moments of their lives. For example, my friend's father who is sixty years old and has a good life in Iran sometimes work overnight to buy their seventh house in Kish, a beautiful island in Iran.

Secondly, people who like education never give up learning something new. We can see in universities old professors who need more rest at home after a long learning new things and teaching to other students are still reading books and researching about something else. For example, Doctor Hessabi, an Iranian mathematician, even when he suffered from the cancer and was close to death, was studying a new mathematics book.

Some people might argue that most of people are satisfied with their marriage and do not need to get married another woman. This point has some merits on the surface; however, it is probably not a correct statement in any cultures. In Arab cultures, many men have more than one woman. In addition, having some hidden relationship some married men with another women shows that most of the men are not pleased just by having one woman.

To sum up, most of the people can be satisfied by neither gaining money and status nor learning something new. In addition, some men even need more than one woman.