Undergraduate / Additional information essay - some things of my life [2]

Hi, it is my addition information essay. I wrote there generally about my life; Take a look and give your opinion.. any grammar or lexical mistakes' correction would be desirable.. Thanks in advance. This is my essay:

I liked discussing different topics, meeting interesting persons, and exchanging ideas in big companies since my childhood. My parents were usual citizens of Kazakhstan. Father was an electrician; and mother was a doctor. But, in spite of this, they made everything so that we, their children, did not need anything and developed catholically. All of my three brothers and I used to go to a music school to play on the piano; we visited various circlets as a swimming, dancing slices and a writing clinic. Our family was very friendly; and we spent holidays together, going out for a picnic or for a sportfishing. I was proud of my parents; I loved and thanked them for the childhood I spent.

I participated in many olympiads and debates. Since there were a lot of interests I had, it was hard for me to choose the way which would be useful for me in the future. I took a part in olympiads by math, informatics and geography, after entering to the school-lyceum number 20. The English language was not taught in full measure at some schools of my city, as in my school. Even in some of schools there were teachers of English who were teachers of German before, and then reeducated. Certainly, scanty store of English of teachers was not a justification for pupils; because who wanted to learn something would always find a knowledge source.

I liked the English language since we started learning it at school; but I had not a lot of chance to study it out of school because of the financial condition. In the summer after the 9th form, I got into a group of children to learn English at a language school “Business center”; and the lessons spent there were liked by me, because a volunteer talked to us in some of lessons. That was the first time of talking to a native speaker of English in my life. I felt myself wonderful after every conversation. I got a foundation of English languages after this two-months course; and I started to learn English myself by reading different books of grammar and lots of stories; discussing different topics; watching movies.

I made the following decision: the best way of learning a language was self-study. But before learning it by self-study, you had to get the basis of a language by help of teachers.

My friends and I was shopping one day in spring, and met two men and a woman dressed in a different type of clothes and spoke English. Surely, to people who saw foreigners every day my reaction might be strange; but I was happy to that meeting. I decided not to lose such a chance, not knowing about what would happen later; we came closer and I started introducing us. They were found very friendly and sociable that they invited us to visit their house one day. Their names were Blayer, Althea, and their children’s names were Jessy and Lacklan. We used to visit them after our lessons.

In the middle of the summer they returned to Australia; but we kept terms with them by the telephone and internet. I learnt a lot about the new culture, new world. I found out that foreigners were very associative, open-minded, friendly and smart. I had a great desire to study in the USA; to cognize the new culture; to know different people and to get the knowledge which was valued all over the world.

Undergraduate / Personal essay for common application.. The topic - Financial crysis in my [10]

Hi, everybody.. I left a little text, and you helped. I really need your help, and any correction of my essay.. Else, I have just 511 words, and i guess a normal lenght must be about 600-800.or is it okay?

This is my essay:
I remember well my childhood which was spent in an urban-type community named Kirovsk. There is a clear air unsoiled by the gas of cars. The weather is warm and not windy in winters, because it is situated in a valley skirted by mountains. I and my brothers often used to buy any kind of sweets in shop; and as I remember, the money given us was enough.

The childhood was passing, and I had to find out my own way for a big life, for a future of mine, for the elaboration of my knowledge and life experience. I entered one of the best schools of Taldykorgan, the school-lyceum number 20; and then a real contestation for knowledge began.

In my opinion, people of the town were more active, more purposeful; every man had his own intention and would not even blink his eyes until he got a result. Noticing all of it, I also tried to be dynamic everywhere, to be patient, to intrude to any company and get into every work.

We are all trying to live change our lives to the best direction, so we must gain more. Nowadays it is getting harder to earn; and lots of vital things are gained with rivalry. Especially now, at the time of World Economic Crisis. The economic crisis is affecting to all countries of the world, as to Kazakhstan and its citizens. It began before now and has brought many challenges.

Staple prices have been increasing from the end of the 2007th year and run up to the drag of 66 percents at a given instant. The government has allocated a sum for 4.5 billion dollars from the National Reserve Foundation to support the condition of the banks. But, grinding difficulties are being suffered by the nation of our republic: salary has been declined; inflation is about 5-7 per cents; the value of daily food has been changed; banks also do not give creedites for small and medium business as much as before; and there are job cuts in big enterprises, factories, combines. For instance, the metallurgical complex of Karagandy reduced 4500 work places. It is a big deprivation for the workers, who have to provide their families in spite of all the troubles. As to any citizen of Kazakhstan, the financial crisis has also got some influences on me. Because of the reduction in salaries of parents and other different reasons the lifestyle of pupils changed: pocket expenses started decreasing; I stopped going to the places like swimming-pools, rinks; the settlement for school is growing and I stop going to additional lessons like math and physics which are very useful for me to pass UNT (Unified National Test).

The government of Kazakhstan is making provision to stabilize the position of its citizens and economic system. But, a lot of countries all over the world have an inferior status than ours, so they need more treatments. It is said that it is just the beginning of the crisis, therefore we must fight against this situation together and help each-other.

Undergraduate / "debating in university life" - elaborate on one of your activities [4]

Hello everybody. I am an international student, going to apply to the US universities. I have read lots of this site's essays and yoru help, and I really like them... It would be good if you help me with my some essays of common application.. Thanks in advance.

Nowadays, in order to be competitive and fulfil your desires, you have to be able to easily communicate with all kinds of people around you. I started debating when I was in secondary school. I liked to discuss different topics with my classmates and elaborate my own points of view for the different topics. When I started my high school, I seriously involved in debating; started to participate in school debate team and we won competition within schools in our town.This experience broadened my knowledge, it helped me to become even more confident. I belive theI am a debater in the college debate club. Even though I am a beginner, I love and enjoy it. From my perspective debating is an art of organizing and delivering thoughts quickly and effectively in order to change people's perception. It not only broadens one's knowledge but also develops problem solving skills, analytical thinking, and ability to work in a team and interact with other students. ability to deliver ideas concisely is important for economists, what I am majoring in. I planning to continue and experience debating in university life.