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Posts by Rosylife
Joined: Apr 29, 2012
Last Post: May 2, 2012
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Rosylife   
May 2, 2012
Writing Feedback / The use of internet should be institutionalized in a community [3]

The widespread use of internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the web? What solutions can you suggest?

One can't deny the fact that the internet has triggered a lot of hassles for people, despite being beneficial in many fields. However, there are certain ways to tackle them.

One of the main problems of using the net too much is that it's heavily time-consuming, as one gets to encounter a variety of irrelevant issues which may keep them from their purpose at the time. Take kids for instance, who normally get involved in playing internet games every time they get on line. This would mean that they would have their time totally wasted at the mercy of playing, which could best be described as a guilty pleasure for many adults, since children would turn out to fall behind with their schedules for schools.

Another important problem is that the net could pave the way to hell with good intentions. That is, many websites aren't appropriate enough for kids to be exposed to. Take vulgar websites for example, which could be pernicious to young people's psyche, as they would, in turn, get deviated from the right path. As a result, such sites could imperil people's future.

The most obvious answer to this issue is for the government to authorities to clamp down on immoral websites so that the likelihood of kids' getting engaged in such websites would get to zero. Another possibility is for authorities to run educational programs for parents to learn the appropriate ways to provide a healthy and safe setting for their kids on the internet, for example by choosing safe-search mode on search engines.

To sum up, there are both pros and cons in using the internet just like any other technological invention; however, the true culture of using them should be institutionalized in the first place in a community.
Rosylife   
Apr 29, 2012
Writing Feedback / Ielts-how to help poor countries? [4]

Hi lynnyang

As far as I'm concerned, first thing you nessd to take care of is your grammar and sentence sructure.

Good luck with your exam.

By the way, if possible, could you have a look at my post as well. let me know what you think of my writing.
Rosylife   
Apr 29, 2012
Writing Feedback / It's natural for everyone not to be able to think out of the box and take risks in the first place. [2]

Hey dudes

Could anyone run his/her eyes through my reading.

Many thanks ***

Topic: People naturally resist making changes in their lives.

It's certainly true that creating novel transformations would be difficult for everyone in their lives by nature. However, there are some ways to boosting the likelihood of that.

One of the main reasons why some people cringe at the idea of changing their lives could be the fact that they were born into families with dogmatic attitudes, where parents are way too conservative in their routine activities. A good case in point is villagers, who are extremely afraid of moving to urban areas. The most obvious answer to this issue is that younger and educated people of such families could convince them by justifying the gains of living in cities. Take facilities for example, such as the availability of hospitals.

Another important reason is that a majority of people are overly nonchalant to take risks in their lives. A good example here is investment in stock market or buying a house. One way is for government authorities to run programs on pros of investment in stock market. Therefore, people would be informed of the ins and outs of the investment.

To sum up, it's natural for everyone not to be able to think out of the box and take risks in the first place.
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