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May 9, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'female dominance' - IELTS-post-school qualifications by gender in Australia 1999 [3]
Hi. I've tried to decribe the chart. Could anyone highlight all the mistakes in my description so I could work on them. I've read a lot of ielts related materials and tried to apply them :)), but I'm not sure about the correctness of what I did.
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The bar chart comapres figures for different rates of post-school qualifications between men and women in Australia in 1999.
It is obvious from the chart that in three out of five given post-school qualifications the percentage of men was higher than that of women.
The figure for men with skilled vocational diploma was at 90%, compared to just 10% of women. The proportion of male postgraduates to female postgraduates was 70% to 30%. The difference between those with master's degree was not that significant, but still rather apperent, with the benefit of men at 60% to 40%.
Bachelor's degree and undergraduate diploma were the two qualifications with female dominance. The percentage of female undergraduates at 65% was almost twofold higher than that of male undergraduates at 35%. The proportion of women to men with bachelor's degree were pretty equal 55% to 45%.
Interestingly, that the difference between the two post-school qualifications with female dominace and the two qualificatons with male dominance where pretty similar, in comparison with skilled vocational diploma.
Hi. I've tried to decribe the chart. Could anyone highlight all the mistakes in my description so I could work on them. I've read a lot of ielts related materials and tried to apply them :)), but I'm not sure about the correctness of what I did.
__________________________________
The bar chart comapres figures for different rates of post-school qualifications between men and women in Australia in 1999.
It is obvious from the chart that in three out of five given post-school qualifications the percentage of men was higher than that of women.
The figure for men with skilled vocational diploma was at 90%, compared to just 10% of women. The proportion of male postgraduates to female postgraduates was 70% to 30%. The difference between those with master's degree was not that significant, but still rather apperent, with the benefit of men at 60% to 40%.
Bachelor's degree and undergraduate diploma were the two qualifications with female dominance. The percentage of female undergraduates at 65% was almost twofold higher than that of male undergraduates at 35%. The proportion of women to men with bachelor's degree were pretty equal 55% to 45%.
Interestingly, that the difference between the two post-school qualifications with female dominace and the two qualificatons with male dominance where pretty similar, in comparison with skilled vocational diploma.
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