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hoshmp   
Sep 20, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS - To reduce traffic in cities, we should reduce traveling by people [4]

Topic: the only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education and shopping.

Traffic is a global problem, nowadays developed and underdeveloped countries both are suffering from traffic problem. Cities like Beijing, New Delhi and Karachi are always worst in traffic. To overcome this problem governments and people have to work together with some possible solutions.

I agree somewhat on this option, that traffic can be lowered by decreasing the need of people to come out on roads with vehicles. In this advanced world it is now possible for people to perform some of their routine work from homes. They can do shopping through online stores and thy will not need to go out to get their goods. The delivery boy can carry goods of many people in one round. Definitely it will work to some extent to overcome this problem. Distance learning, like to get enrolled in some online courses, people can learn and get education while staying at home. There are some works also which we can do at homes, like making applications for computers, some handicraft work. So the job providers can also engage people at work and they can carry their outputs in one round from their homes.

However, this is not the only option of controlling traffic problem. There are only limited course which can we learn at homes. I will give here example of my own field and a veterinary medicine student; I can not learn clinical skills without going to field or in animal hospital. Likewise an engineer can not learn their skills at staying at home using this distance learning option. On other hand there are only limited jobs which we can perform from home. However considering this option we should also look on other useful options like, making public transport easily available and cheap so people can turn towards to avail this facility. Similarly, Educating people by seminar to teach them that avoid the unnecessary use of vehicles. If distance of your destination is very short you should go through walk, it is better for health as well.

i will conclude by saying that, I agree with this option that we can reduce the traffic by reducing the need to come out. But this is not the only valuable option. We should also consider other good options to overcome this global problem.
hoshmp   
Sep 20, 2012
Writing Feedback / Toefl: taking action directly is usually a good strategy [2]

it is nice approach, but i think you should write in four paras, 1st Introduction, than discuss topic, than your view, and finally conclusion. i am also learning so if you know better share with me.
hoshmp   
Jun 2, 2012
Writing Feedback / Computer is an electronic device made by the humans for the welfare of human being. [4]

Topic: Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them.

In what ways are computers a hindrance?

What is your opinion?

Today's global age is the consequence of computer age. Computer is an electronic device made by the humans for the welfare of human being. Today we are dependent on computer in every thing and can not live without it.

Some people think computer is a more hindrance than help. I will disagree with them; there is positive as well negative use of computer. It depend upon the people how they use it? Increase use of computer leading bad effect on eyes and brain. Apart from health issue, today most of children prefer to play games on computer and they are avoiding social activities. In youth there is increase in use of social websites they do chat and do other activates on these websites rather than meeting friends practically and doing other social activities practically. Some crimes are also associated with computer like hacking, by which hackers steal personal information and misuse it.

However, when we look at the positive impacts of computer on our lives, we will feel that it is very helpful. I will mention about my own field veterinary medicine, some invention in diagnostic tools like C.T scan and ultrasound which are computer linked and has made diagnosis easy and accurate. It is very helpful for doctors to treat animals with such remarkable computer technologies. Likewise traffic is also being controlled by computers, and driving is now easy and safe by use of computer. Today our aeroplanes are using computers for navigation and weather update; it is very helpful for a pilot to fly. Computer has made this world as a global village; we are in keep in touch with peoples around the world. Some forums and are use by different experts of different fields and they share their valuable experience there and it is very helpful for each other. Students are using computer as a library, thousands of books and journals are available to explore by just one click.

I will conclude by saying that there is some hindrance by using computer, but by proper education to the people about its safe use we can avoid these hindrance. Other than that computer is very helpful millions of jobs are created by computer. hence every one is getting benefit of computer from child to adult and from teachers to students so I think computer is very helpful in our lives.