Writing Feedback / 'it brings efficiency' - Face-to-face Communication. Opinion essay (IELTS) [4]

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Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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The advanced technology has revolutionized ways people communicating, in which e-mail, phone calls is more and more play an important role in human being. Although there are many undeniable benefits of modern communication methods, I am convinced that the traditional method, face-to-face communication, is the best way in communicating to people.

This essay will find out some relevant reasons and try to support for them.
To begin with, face-to-face communication can enhance the effectiveness in communicating. It is apparent that this way helps people to save their valuable time. Sending and receiving letters always have to spend days in post offices and transmitting. Another better method, e-mail has expected to reducing time consuming which is induced by hand-writing letters. However, it is irrefutable that it is often occurs errors when people exchange mails related to network quality or web browser capacity. Additionally, users are often confused by spam and advertising mails. Obviously, face-to-face communication makes conversations more clear and smooth. People talk to each other directly hence, many contradictions can be resolve instantaneously.

Another reason is that face-to-face communication is also the best way to relax. People are increasingly been busy in the hectic pace of life. Thus, perhaps life will be full of stress and difficulties if anyone can not talk to other naturally and comfortably. Some researches have recently argued that at least ten-minute talking to others per day makes them not only relaxed but also be smarter.

By way of conclusion, face-to-face method brings efficiency in communicating and gives people opportunities to relax. I once again reaffirm that this communication method is better than other kinds such as letters, e-mail or phone calls.

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Writing Feedback / born with talents - children could be an outstanding individuals [4]

People have diffirent views about whether children's talents is innate or they need to be taught. In my opinion, sucesses of every individuals people is the combination of heredity factors and continuous practicing.

On the one hand, some are convinced that children and their talents are born together. Many well-known athletes, excellent musicians are frequently recognized as people that were born for there areas of art or sport. Obviously, any child, who has inherited talents via its parents's genes, can be beneficial in way of being expert in some particular areas, compared with the rest, who do not possess any natural capacities. Along with this, a born musician can also be bright enough to learn musical rules and performance techniques which a normal child may be have differences with easily.

On the other hand, there is a increasingly widespread perspective in our society today that children have to be trained to become professional and skillful. Indeed, many successful people have claimed that genius is the result of a long-term and enduring effort, not something innate. In fact, we has been surprised with people who are not excellent naturally even have been faced serious diseases, they, however, have still achieved a lot of successes in their areas by a resilient will and always hard-working.

I, nevertheless, believe that these days, education systems are based on the capacity to help learner to accumulate knowledge and acquire professional skills as much as possible. In other words, every child has equivalent opportunities to achieve his/her own techniques in studying or working. Hence, if an individuals person wish to be expert in any field, he/she have to expect to his inherited abilities.

By way of conclusion, it seems to me that children could be an outstanding individuals whenever they make attempt at accumulating knowledge and be taught or trained particular skills in order to activate their innate abilities.