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Jun 25, 2012
Undergraduate / 'DETERMINED TO BE SOMEBODY' - Howard University Admission Essay [4]

Great ideas, and great beginning. Try to be more specific. Admissions committees are looking for individuals who they feel will best represent their university. Try to speak to how Howard, specifically, will help you achieve your dreams. Also, try to avoid cliches. "...will assist me in becoming someone, someday." Admissions committees see words and phrases like this all the time, so you need to write something that will stick out. Write exactly who or what it is you want to be someday. You write "...to prove to myself that I have what it takes to be someone." This is too vague. Try to narrow down what it is you want to do and who you want to be and go from there.
Jun 23, 2012
Graduate / Why Do You Want to Become a Teacher? -- Bac Elementary Education [4]

Entrance Essay for Post Bac Elementary Education Program

This is my very first draft. I am not a strong writer, so please, be honest! I would like to use more descriptive and advanced vocabulary. And I've also never written an essay for a graduate application, so I'm not sure what they admissions committee is looking for when it comes to these essays. Here is the prompt:

I have written an essay for Drexel University, and I am applying to the post-baccalaureate elementary education program. The prompt is to write about why I am interested in pursuing graduate study in education.

While preparing to write this essay, I was searching through quotes regarding various teaching philosophies. I came across a few that were noteworthy, but one struck a chord with me, written by an unknown author: "A good teacher is like a candle-it consumes itself to light the way for others." I can confirm that this statement is true. Throughout college, I worked as an assistant preschool teacher. It is because of this experience that I was able to recognize my dream of becoming a certified teacher. I have never felt so accomplished, so proud. It is here that I realized what joy it brings me to plan and implement a lesson. It is here that I realized how remarkable it is to see a child learn something new every day. It is also here that I realized teaching is my dream.

When I speak of the word "consume" in the preceding quote, I do not speak of it in a negative sense. To me, to consume myself in my work as a teacher does not mean to work myself to the point of destruction. It, instead, means to work very hard to develop myself and my craft. To become a certified teacher will help me do so. I have such a strong desire to learn about new and emerging education theories, and how I would implement them in my own classroom to allow all of my students to learn to the best of their abilities.

I was diagnosed with severe Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder in my junior year of college. This was such a relief to me because I finally was able to understand why school had been so difficult for me. Though I loved learning, I always found myself becoming frustrated because I could not concentrate on an assignment long enough to complete it to the best of my abilities. Although my diagnosis did not come until college, my learning disability is something that affected my entire school career. For example, in the third grade, I was the only child in the room who struggled with the differences between "they're" and "their." I could not pay attention to the lesson long enough to learn how one word differentiated from the other. Luckily, I had a wonderful third grade teacher named Mrs. Cassettes who was an amazing educator. She saw that I was struggling. Reflecting back, I now can see that instead of trying to change my learning style, she sought to change her teaching style. I was a musically inclined individual and Mrs. Cassettes was able to identify that. She composed a song about how to use the two words and taught it to the whole class, as not to single me out. I will never forget the song, or Mrs. Cassettes.

Becoming a certified teacher will allow me to help my own students through similar situations. Though this only represents a small fragment of why I want to become a certified teacher, it certainly is a most accurate fragment. Learning in the early years is such an important process. How one learns and is taught here stays with a person for life. If I had any other teacher than Mrs. Cassettes, I would not have fond memories of school and learning. I want to be a part of that for the future generations.

I look forward to reading your comments.

You are welcome to be brutally honest! I need all the help I can get!