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Jul 10, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'transporting goods on railway and pipeline' IELTS [4]
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'' The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport''.
The line graph illustrates the numbers of product transported by the Great Britain's 4 modes kind of transport from 1974 to 2002. In general, there are two big trends in this graph : upward and stable.
As can be seen, the quantities of goods delivered by road vehicles and ships grew up over the period of time. Staring with road transport, the first 20 years witnessed a mind fluctuation between slightly over 70m tonnes and approximately 80m tonnes goods transported which shot up significantly to well under 100m tonnes in 1998, then less slightly in the final reported years. Meanwhile, in using ships transporting, there was a dramatic rise in the products delivered from around 40m tonnes in 1974 to nearly 60m tonnes in 1982, after that it remained until 1994. In the next year, although a moderate dip was saw in the quantities of the goods, it recovered rapidly by about 20m tonnes in 2002.
On the other hand, transporting goods on railway and pipeline has a stabilize trend. Despite of being similar trend, delivery on railway had several features which was different with pipeline. For example; from 1974 to 1982, the quantities of goods transported by rail declined steadily by 30m tonnes whereas pipeline, a gradual rise of 10m tonnes.
please help me! i need someone who can fix my incorrect grammar
'' The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport''.
The line graph illustrates the numbers of product transported by the Great Britain's 4 modes kind of transport from 1974 to 2002. In general, there are two big trends in this graph : upward and stable.
As can be seen, the quantities of goods delivered by road vehicles and ships grew up over the period of time. Staring with road transport, the first 20 years witnessed a mind fluctuation between slightly over 70m tonnes and approximately 80m tonnes goods transported which shot up significantly to well under 100m tonnes in 1998, then less slightly in the final reported years. Meanwhile, in using ships transporting, there was a dramatic rise in the products delivered from around 40m tonnes in 1974 to nearly 60m tonnes in 1982, after that it remained until 1994. In the next year, although a moderate dip was saw in the quantities of the goods, it recovered rapidly by about 20m tonnes in 2002.
On the other hand, transporting goods on railway and pipeline has a stabilize trend. Despite of being similar trend, delivery on railway had several features which was different with pipeline. For example; from 1974 to 1982, the quantities of goods transported by rail declined steadily by 30m tonnes whereas pipeline, a gradual rise of 10m tonnes.
