Undergraduate / 1000 Character Common App Question--Piano [2]

Is my response relevant to the question? I feel like it's to artsy. Should I be more direct? Any other advice?

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

The keys are lined up in a uniform fashion, one by one, 88 in total. White keys are polarized by the mysteriously black keys. They glisten in the sun as I play the works of the greats in history, Debussy's Arabesque No.1. To some, this may be an ordinary piano, but to me, it is a time machine. As my fingers begin to dance across the keys, the sound that reverberates out of the piano brings me to the year 1891: the Romantic era, a time of emotional expression as tempo rubato suggests. Suddenly, my left hand transforms into a rabbit as it hops around the bass line as my right hand climbs the melody of the treble. Now, it is 1907. Scott Joplin and Louis Chauvin's Heliotrope Bouquet bursts into the room with effervescent ambition that conjures up a warm smile in my face. I am surrounded by merrymakers, cowboys, sheriffs all clanking their glasses at the local saloon. It is with the short pop of the last chord that brings me back to the present. Reality is restored and I am back in my teal-green living room.

Undergraduate / 'Sustainable food = a feasible task" - University of Michigan at Ann Arbor supplement [2]

Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)

Never in my life would I ever imagine myself to be a farmer. But alas, here I am bent over in my high school courtyard garden bed frantically trying to protect my precious squash, Swiss chard and basil from the evil green nutrient-sucking adversaries. Pollution-inducing herbicides and toxic artificial fertilizers are strictly forbidden. After all, this is a one-hundred percent organic sustainable garden! By taking measures such as using compost from school lunches for fertilizer and watering the crops from our rain collection bins, we have successfully grown food in a manner that reduces the negative impacts on the environment. In this kind of community I value the importance of spreading awareness in growing food in a sustainable way that does not have a negative impact on the environment.

In our community, we are a group of passionate, energetic, and creative high school volunteers who have a deep regard for the environment. I personally joined this community because I had an interest in learning how to grow food in a sustainable manner. The garden supports a the belief in conservatism; we do not waste any of our resources and try our best to recycle them in any way possible. Although this may seem to be a bit more tedious and time-consuming, our motivation to grow responsibly preservers through. As a result, we are able to grow enough food each week to harvest and sell with other local farmers at the town Farmer's Market. I personally feel that our garden has succeeded in its goal; we have proven to other people that sustainable food is in fact, a feasible task. Now, we can finally enjoy the fruits (and vegetables) of our labor.

Thank you for the inputs!