Undergraduate / "Aviation"- the word in which I found male domination; Chasing High Altitudes [3]

Hi,
Its a good essay,but more should be added to your statements.

Writing Feedback / Obamacare: Heading Down? (against the health care programs promoted) [5]

You should look at the advantages and disadvantages of Obamacare then come up with a stronger thesis which will guide you through to the conclusion.

Graduate / 'Thousands days of my life' - PA School Autobiographical Essay [2]

Hi,
An autobiography talks more about the life of a person.You should therefore talk more about your accomplishments if any.

Graduate / MBA Essay on accomplishments. [5]

Hi,
I have read your accomplishments.You need to write more on your achievements,the essay should make them be realistic.

Essays / The role of art in our modern life. check my mistakes! [3]

Below I have provided you with the edited work.

Humankind was created with Art in him . Despite early man not being able to speak,they could draw pictures or pictograms. Later, people drew more beautiful illustrations as their knowledge about art improved .This led to the appearance of art and it became one of the most beautiful part the human life.Art has evolved and today there are many forms of art. People think about art as it's the inside world of their own. Because we have love about art in our blood. However, our modern and expanded life may be busy with other problems or solving solutions about them, even like these situations can't make us to live without art. Every modern mansions or even modern building is based on art,and it is because humans love beauty. Art lives with us until tend to despise beauty,but we were born to love beauty,therefore this is the human nature. From ancient to modern masterpieces created by people are all products of art. So we can say the role of art role in our modern society is very important,therefore art gives us pleasure, we're always delighted when we see proficiency or miracles created by us. Thanks to art, we don't forget that we need it to make ourselves look beautiful!