redskinsman95
Oct 28, 2012
Undergraduate / 'I had to stay strong for my family' VCU PG87 autobiography essay [2]
alexusmln
"The last couple of days of his life I spent with my precious uncle. He was speechless, emotional less, and fragile." This needs to be one sentence, just put a comma before he was speechless.
Also, you said your grandmother "pasted" out. I think you meant to say "passed."
Other than that, good piece of writing. You did a good job in drawing the reader into your experience. You are also a very strong person :)
alexusmln
"The last couple of days of his life I spent with my precious uncle. He was speechless, emotional less, and fragile." This needs to be one sentence, just put a comma before he was speechless.
Also, you said your grandmother "pasted" out. I think you meant to say "passed."
Other than that, good piece of writing. You did a good job in drawing the reader into your experience. You are also a very strong person :)