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Joined: Nov 5, 2012		 Last Post: Mar 18, 2013
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ibadullah   
Mar 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'technology does not kill the tradition' [8]

Dear Jenny,
its a longg time ago that i talk you about the preperation of IELTS so i passed the IELTS test and achieving a band score of 6 out of 9. Could you give me a favour. Please read these articles and pin out the grammer mistakes. i will be very thankful to you if you give me time to read my aricles and also please give me feed back.

unforgettablelifemoments.blogspot.com/2013/03/that-cold-night.html

That cold night is based on a true story of a family in pakistan. The story revolves around this family and a driver whom they met when they were returning home from a picnic trip. What happened with this family and how they spend the whole night in a totally new place and whom they trust is trust worthy or not. TThis incidence occurred in 2004 with a family which lived in Rawalpindi. This is a true story and is based on disembodied spirits that somehow dominate over human bodies and also make trouble for humans. here is the full story see the blog for interesting and true stories all new ones.

A mysterious man
A mysterious old man This story happened about 11 years back and is about a mysterious man, an old man who can trap anyone with his mystic words. He uses such magical words that everyone can beleive him of what he is saying. He is an expert in fooling others. This story is also real and true and involves a young boy which could not escape from the voice of this old man. these all stories are written just to let you know what can happen in this so called world. What is happening with people around us and how selfish and bad people are in this world. These all stories are shared with you to make you aware of the various circumstances. These true stories are because to take advice in life from their experiences.

Read the sad story really sad and what happened to that young boy.

unforgettablelifemoments.blogspot.com/2013/03/a-mysterious-old-man.html

Mother is a gift of God and everyone should take care of his or her mother. Whenever something happens to you how much sweetly she cares and asks us about the problem we are having. So this gift need also our attention and care. she could also have problems and she can also get tired of all the work. We all should take care of our mothers. This true story is about a loving and caring mother who when comes to caring also forgets about herself.

how much she cares about her family and what she can do when it comes to care. A real story based on a family living in Pakistan read yourself at

unforgettablelifemoments.blogspot.com/2013/03/an-unforgettable-mother.html

A Widow Village Woman">This story occurred before the seperation of Pak-o-Hind. This story is about a woman named marium who after her husband death struggle hard to brought up her child. she was alone in the world with no help from her family and she know about it. So she worked hard instead of looking forward to her family for support. She wants to marry her daughter to a person which is kind and well earner so that her daughter could not suffer later but she faced many hurdles in the way to her marriage. But who helped her on her way and who helped her in arranging her daughter marriage. Read it and plz comment if you like. These stories are based on real incidents.

unforgettablelifemoments.blogspot.com/2013/03/mariums-story-widow-village-woman-this.html

Regards
Ibadullah Safdar
ibadullah   
Mar 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'technology does not kill the tradition' [8]

Dear Jenny,
its a longg time ago that i talk you about the IELTS so i passed the IELTS test and achieving a band score of 6 out of 9. Could you give me a favour. Please read these art
ibadullah   
Nov 11, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'technology does not kill the tradition' [8]

Dear Jenniflower81:
Thamk you so much for your kind response. The line which you ,emtion i meaqn to say that the richer countries should provide them the photocopies of that books.

Jenni i also write the essay about the 'museum' plz check it also if you have some time i will be very thankful to you once again thankyou for giving me your precious time. tell me about the people in america did they allright and also you because last week i heared the news of flood.

Best Regard:
Ibadullah Safdar
ibadullah   
Nov 10, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'museum can attract visitors' - [ielts] topic with museum [8]

Plz every one comment on this

There are different kinds of people having different personalities and opinions living all over the world. As the statement says that some of the people think that museum are build for the sake of just entertainment so i agree with these people and the people which say that they are build for the education, I also agree with them. This is explained as below.

There are diversification in museums for example 'Historical Museum' in which the museum reveals about the history of some place or of some famous people. So the people who are interested in history will go there and get entertained from it . These people are those who does not belong to history field because they are just ordinary people who have different profession and there are some people for example masters students who have to research in the history field so that museums will become an education place for them and also entertained from it. Similarly there are so many other museums which are related to Engineering, Artistic and Mural fields etc. So some people willl go there on the behalf of their education profession while other for just entertainment in excursions time.

In conclusion i must say that it depends on the interest because both kind of people get entertainment and education. for example if one person is an electrical engineer then he prefers to go to that museum which is according to his profession to obtain knowledge from it and get entertained so the museum will become an entertainment and education place for him. If the other person who is an ordinary and if he has some interest in that field then he will go for the entertainment otherwise he will not go. The government should build museum in such a way that both parties will entertained and educate.
ibadullah   
Nov 6, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'working for the childrens right' - Children engaged in paid work essay [5]

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as
completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning
and taking responsibility.

I am writing about the above topic plz correct my mistakes

I think i am from the one of people who dont agree with this statement. Childrens in the europe countries dont have need to do the work because their expenses are taken by the governmet only they have to do is to concentrate on their education until they graduates and find the job where as in some asian countries like Pakistan, the life of childrens are totally based on their parents and it is the duty of the parents to firstly educate their childrens rather than to do work for the income. There are some parents who are financially bad so when their childrens grow up they engaged them in some kind of work to support their families like they place their childrens on the car workshop, on the roads to sell different things etc. So it is a great responsibility of parents to educate their childs first. This can only be done when their is a support for the poor parents from the government.

Some people who think that childrens should do work so that they gain experience are totally wrong. I think the childrens cannot take experience until they are well educated and if we donot do this then the intellectual habits does not develop and they are just like a robot which will do the same work which we will assign them. Suppose an uneducated child is doing a job and after a long time time ago he was jobless and he is finding very difficulty in finding the job and in this duration he has no income so he was obliged to do some wrong work may be he become a theif or anything worse so if that child was giving education then in the future he can do well for himself like in jobless duration, he can teach the students personally.

There are so many NGO's all over the world which are working on this delimma. The second responsibility is on them to educate the childrens who belong to lower class family. The most famous NGO UNICEF which is working for the childrens right, is doing a good job.

So in the last i must say that it is our obligation and it is conspicuous that we should educate our childrens for their better futrue and prosperity of mankind.
ibadullah   
Nov 6, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'technology does not kill the tradition' [8]

Dear Jennyflower81:
Thankyou for your kind suggestion. I am preparing for the IELT's test and in the writing section they asked to write atleast 250 words for the topic so kindly tell me what should i do. Once again thanks for your generous support.

Best Regard:
Ibadullah Safdar
ibadullah   
Nov 5, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'technology does not kill the tradition' [8]

i am writing about this topic to check my writing skills. i appeal to any moderator to please check it i will be very thankful to you.

Plz check it and take out the mistakes i will be very thankful to you. the essay statement is given below
Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer
nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for
helping the poorer nations in such areas.

yes i agree with this statement that richer countries should help the underdeveloping countries in the field of health, education and trade. Contemporary these fields play a substantial role that no one can survive without these. Health is the major factor in poor countries which need to be considered for example the health factor in south africa is so much worse that they cannot overcome this without the help of richer countries. The most epidemic disease is the AID in this country which can be prevent if the richer countries provides the medicines, nurses and docttors free and every other amenities without any incentives.

Education also plays an important role in the development of every nation. The poor countries which are not good in this field should be supported by richer countries for example now a days so many countries are offeering the free masters programme for students of underdeveloped countries but the main problem is that it should not restricted to the masters level because there are some countries which could not give education to the college level and even to the primary level so the government of richer countries should provision them free used books. There is also one possibility that the richer countries can also give the pirated coppies to these such poor countries

Trade also plays an important role in the ecnomic development of every country. The countries which are not good in this field must be supported by richer countries. This can only be done when some of the taxes are raised off for the poor countries for a given period of time and when they thrive then you can take the taxes on the mainly basis. The second option to overcome this problem is to give the subsidy without any incentives or interest. The world bank should give the subsidy to poor countries without any interest. By doing this there is no pressure of debt on the poor countries and they flourish effectively. The sbsidy given to these countries should not for the prolonged time because by doing this the countries will become used to with it. There is must an agreement .

In conclusion i must say that richer countries should help the poor countries in such fields for their evolution

Best Regard:
Ibadullah Safdar
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