leahdaoud
Nov 19, 2012
Undergraduate / UC Prompt #1- "Superheroes" [2]
While I LOVE this essay, I'm just not sure it fully responds to the prompt. Maybe you could write more about how ballet has shaped you personally? How has it stretched you? Could you expand on how it raised your confidence? Something like that, anyway. :-)
That being said, I love your writing style. It's personal and friendly and makes me want to get to know you better. Good luck with the admissions process!
While I LOVE this essay, I'm just not sure it fully responds to the prompt. Maybe you could write more about how ballet has shaped you personally? How has it stretched you? Could you expand on how it raised your confidence? Something like that, anyway. :-)
That being said, I love your writing style. It's personal and friendly and makes me want to get to know you better. Good luck with the admissions process!