hemanths
Nov 21, 2012
Graduate / Statement of Purpose for Ph.D. in Telecommunications;Need Help [2]
Your 1st paragraph can be more attractive. Express why you were motivated to pursue a career in teaching profession and that you see this PhD as a stepping stone in this journey for reaching your ultimate goal.
After acquiring a sound foundation and excelling
Be clear in what you have acquired a sound foundation, B.E. in E&C is your accomplishement
I outline my academic and research accomplishments, career objectives and motivation below.
I feel this statement is implicit, not needed
After collaboration and detailed discussions with 5 exceptionally talented and dedicated team members, and working under an excellent guide and mentor in the form of Prof.Sandeep Yadav, I realised the importance of qualities like a clear conceptual understanding, a well-focussed mind, patience and integrity in the field of research.
This is a lengthy sentenace cut this short, and combine it with your next paragraph
You need not mention too much details of your internship, key take-away's from that experience should be sufficient.
Your 1st paragraph can be more attractive. Express why you were motivated to pursue a career in teaching profession and that you see this PhD as a stepping stone in this journey for reaching your ultimate goal.
After acquiring a sound foundation and excelling
Be clear in what you have acquired a sound foundation, B.E. in E&C is your accomplishement
I feel this statement is implicit, not needed
After collaboration and detailed discussions with 5 exceptionally talented and dedicated team members, and working under an excellent guide and mentor in the form of Prof.Sandeep Yadav, I realised the importance of qualities like a clear conceptual understanding, a well-focussed mind, patience and integrity in the field of research.
This is a lengthy sentenace cut this short, and combine it with your next paragraph
You need not mention too much details of your internship, key take-away's from that experience should be sufficient.