Writing Feedback / Past Paragaph - "sell-as-much-as-we-can" method [5]

in sentence 1, customers needs an apostrophe. it should be customers'. and i think you need a comma after "to after 1950" (to after 1950,)
sentence 2... "Before the 1950s [insert comma]"
paragraph 2... take out "in my opinion"... that phrase makes your point weaker rather than stronger

looks good!

Undergraduate / 'A career politician' - College Application Essay- Topic A [3]

i believe you are not supposed to type out numbers... ex - '4' instead of 'four'

also be careful not to make your mother the main focus of this essay, because it is supposed to be an evaluation on how she has impacted you and changed your life. other than that your essay looks good!