Undergraduate / Walking in the coldness of the winter/ Common App [11]

Hola,

Your essay shows the hard work and effort that you put into it.

The last sentence in your essay can be rephrased as " Now, I can adapt myself to new situations and make improvements in my life ".

Hope that helps a little bit.

Undergraduate / Exodus to epiphany - Common App Essay! [17]

Hola,

In paragraph 2, at the end of line 1, with "dusted[/b] clothes" there is a problem with the adjective used.

[b]To dust means to sprinkle with a fine powdery substance, like you dust farmlands with chemical (insecticides) so it is correct to say dusted farmlands or police dusted the crime scene for fingerprints.

Conversely, we can also have dusted off doormats which means doormats from which dust has been removed by brushing or shaking etc.

So what is the correct adjective here... In all likelihood, what you really intended to write was "dusty clothes" which mean clothes with dust on them.

Hope that helps a little bit!