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Jan 15, 2013
Undergraduate / Smith College - A theme song that describes you best; "What's This!" [3]

please be harsh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!thanks!!!!!!!!And since I am not a native speaker, great warriors, please kill my grammar mistakes as well~!!!!! : ]

Prompt:Applying to college can be serious business; yet we're eager to get to know you in a less formal way. Have fun answering the following question: If you had a theme song - a piece of music that describes you best - what would it be and why? Please include the name of the song and the artist. (Limit response to 150 words)

Every morning when jumping out of my quilt castle, I feel like coming out from mom's womb again. Both the universe and I are young, and everything is new. I can't help starting my day with a surprised scream:

"What's this? Is it a mushroom?"
"No. It's dad holding an umbrella."
"What's this? Is it alchemy?"
"No. It's magnesium burning in oxygen."
"What's this? Is it a violation of marriage law?"
"No. It's a special marriage custom of Mosuo people, and you should learn to appreciate their culture!" answered my 17-year-old self.
I enjoy being confused, amazed, or dumbfound, which means chances to learn and experience something new. I keep asking "what's this", then "why" and "what if", yearning to explore the unknown like there's no tomorrow, for the more I know, the more I don't know. That's why Danny Elfman's "What's this" vividly portraits my life! And every time I look at this interesting world with curious infant' eyes and ask, I always find world a fine place and worth fighting for.
biubiubiubiu   
Dec 28, 2012
Undergraduate / "Yes, I am a dancer"; Common App [6]

hi are you from cuus? i know a girl whose name is the same as yours lol~~~~~~~~
biubiubiubiu   
Dec 26, 2012
Undergraduate / SCARS; YALE Supp / say more about you [8]

Hi I'm working on my yale supplement too and surprisingly we have a same title lol~~~ ( though about different theme
overall speaking, your essay is written well and delivers a good message. However, my only concern is that haven't yale admission officers already read too many essays the same kind as yours? if they can guess the ending from the beginning, how are they supposed to remember you from so many applicants and accept you?

only some personal opinions haha~~~gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood luck~!!!!!!
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