Essays / ACHIEVEMETNTS AMIDST TOUGH ENVIRONMENTS [16]

Hi Every one~ I am writing an essay about my achievements for an university admission.
Please check it and see if there is any Thing that needs adjustment, and if I can change some phrases to make it better...

The accomplishments that are made by a person from the beginning of his life, determines his future. In the day of my birth, my grandmother who passed away 2 years ago said that I will be a magnificent person in the future. when I was three years old I saw two men from our balcony stealing from a shop down the street. I ran immediately to the police men and told them what I saw, they didn't hesitate after seeing my serious expressions and caught the robbers fast. The shopkeeper and the policemen were extremely grateful and thanked me for such a heroic act. This made my family very proud of me.

After two years I moved to United Kingdom, a completely new place and experience for me. First, I learnt a whole new language rapidly. My passion to learn amused all my teachers, this was a big achievement for me. I was studying seven days a week, from Monday to Friday in a British school and from Saturday to Sunday at a Libyan school. I doubled my effort to gain high scores in each school. I joined reading and art clubs, took a main role in big vaudevilles.

Sport is an important part of my life, being a member at the schools swimming team and the coach's assistant also the top runner, I managed to achieve the first medal in a general sports competition. Furthermore, I participated in many activities including raising money for charity, and street cleaning campaigns.

In the Revolution period, my life was in great danger. On 14th of June a rocket stork my uncle's house while we were sleeping, two of my cousins passed away immediately and I got injured by a shrapnel. Losing my beloved ones is definitely the hardest moment I had faced . However, I never stopped from achieving my goals.

I volunteered at hospitals, also I was an Editorship at an English daily Newspaper. I wrote many articles that had an excellent feedback. As a Journalist I had a chance to meet and work with outstanding people from UN, Toronto star Newspaper, Chosun Newspaper, NBC Network and many more. This opportunity unleashed my abilities and made me achieve important thing towards my dream.

Scholarship / I was a very curious child; My goals/ Scholarship [7]

Hi All,
This is my essay and I will be gratful if you could check it out and correct anything in it from grammer to everthing...
Please fell free to change any words that u think fits the best.
The essay is about my goals, ambition and what will this scholarship mean to you.

During my childhood I was very curious to know everything surrounded me. Having a passion to learn, invent new things and make experiments.
Living for four years in United Kingdom a multi-cultural country made me interact with people from different backgrounds and open my mind into the world. I became interested in discovering new cultures and diversities.

Coming from an educated family I took all the complements to succeed in my education. Although I can't afford my education expenses, my dad who obtains a Ph.D. in Architecture supported me and taught me to never give up my dream.

As a competitive person I like to challenge myself, this made me place first in one of the top high schools in Libya.

My ambition can't be described as a normal ambition for an ordinary person; I can see myself among the magnificent people who influenced the word, having Nobel Prize for solving major problems like global warming and discovering cure for Aids.

These achievements don't come by dreaming only but with hard work and strong motivation, which made me investigate on the global warming issue, reaching to a solution not only solves this issue but to adaption it to an energy resource.

Ana University has high quality facilities, Brilliant connoisseurs and an ideal environment for studying, which make it one of the leading universities in the World.

Studying at Ana University will enhance my abilities to be a successful person towards my career making me an active pioneer in society. I am confident that I will be a helpful member at this outstanding university . Last year I had a scholarship to study in Canada, but when the Libyan uprising happened all the embassies closed and I lost my scholarship, but I never lost hope of having a good education.