Writing Feedback / IELTS Bar graph; How people invested money [2]

IELTS TASK 1. The graph below shows the way people in Somecountry invested thier money during the years 2001-2006.

Ans: (Comments please)

The chart shows amount of money spent on bonds and stocks, In some country between year 2001 and 2006.

It can be clearly seen that, lowest amount spent on bonds in year 2001 are recorded 100 billions. The next three higher rates are in
2002,2003 and 2004 are recorded 125 billion, 157 billion and 163 Billion respectively. The following year amount spent on bonds
Were recorded much higher then previous year with sum of 179 billion and only 9 million less than the peak total of year 2006.

Rate on Stock is almost double then bonds Through out the 6 years, where highest rate are recorded in year 2006 (311 billions). The lowest investment of money is recorded in year 2001 and 2002 with sum of 122 and 122 respectively, which are double than the amount spent on bonds in same year.

In the following year, 2004 and 2005 trend is recorded, where amount spent of stocks was nearly double than amount spent on bonds 289 and 297 billion respectively.

In conclusion, the report shows that people are intrested to invested more on stocks campaired to bonds during the period of six year.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Classmates Vs Parents - Influence on child's future [5]

PART 2: Q: Do you agree with the following statement? Classmates are more important influence than parents on child's future..?

ANS:
In today's world due advance technology and emerging concept of "Quantum Physics" did uncovered many mysteries, which also includes the effects of human energy field. Which has direct effects on our brain and body? Therefore it is debatable to find out influential factors on child future. The writer will discuss different way in which influence Childs future.

According to Quantum Physicists ever thing is made of atom which has energy filed. Combination of these fields forms energy field around humans. This field can be negative or positive which depends on the feelings and intentions of the person. This does affect our children in either way. If the environment is negative, he will be effected negatively and same in other case. "A man is known by the company he keeps" reflects both kind of influence in our society. Therefore it is important to know the foundation acceptability or power of resistance in society for both influences.

Parents are first to set the foundation and path for the child future. First of all it is responsibility of the parents to teach their children the basic manners acceptable in the society. They teach them about the power to say "No" and "Yes". The basics acceptable manner in the society makes children ready to face the situation in schools. Child will be able to choose well from bad, and this will lead to a good future. A human brain produces over 30 thousand thoughts in a day. So it can be good or bad. Important thing is to prepare a child for this challenge to accept those, which are recommended by parents.

Similarly, Child without good foundation is highly vulnerable to embrace habits which will mislead them. This can direct to confusion and put them in a non returnable situation. Good classmates can help a child grown in unhealthy family environment by putting him/her on right path for a good future. However there are many successful people who do not went to school but still they are successful.

From the above discussion it is clear classmates and parents mutually responsible to set child future which is also proved by quantum physics that every human has negative and positive energy field which reflects his/her intention and feelings.

In a nutshell, my opinion is that parents are most important to set the good foundation for child future, how ever we cannot ignore the influence of the classmates in this case.

Writing Feedback / Today more people are travleing then ever before; IELTS [4]

Essay Part 2. IELTS
Q. Today more people are travleing then ever before,
Why is this the case?
What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

(Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from you own knowledge and experience)

Ans:

In today's world, advance technology has changed infrastructure which includes, communication & transportation. In ancient time people were using camels, horses to traveling hundreds of miles, where it was taking days and month to reach the destination. Thanks to modern and advance technology which has change the transportation system and now its hours instead of days to reach the desire destination.

First reason behind the high rate of traveling is the airplane, which has reduced monthly travel time to hours only. These machine are capable to travel hundreds mile in very short time. Second reason is the advertisement by tourism industry. The robust technology has made it possible to deliver their message across the world in seconds about the new attractive places along with its live view on interview and television channels.

Every thing is negative and positive impacts at same time. One of the draw back of technology is that people get stuck in very busy environment of work and home. It is very important to spend some time far from office in nature where they really can enjoy their few moments free of tension. Human body is like a machine it needs break and requires a touch of nature.

There are a variety of place to travel, personally I like to visit a place where every thing is natural, streams, green belts and fresh air. During that time I feel that I am fueling my body which gives me energy and inspiration to live life. In contrary every human has its own wish and taste where they feel free and energetic. This is very important and a secret to live longer.

In conclusion it is worthy to mention the latest machine has made easy to travel more often than the before, other wise it would not be possible to see vital growth in touring industry.