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ankush   
Jun 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / Now day's crime is increasing. Why is this happening? What can government do? [8]

ya i do agree with u guys there is a problem in coherence and sentence structure but ielts examiner oftenly congnizant about the difficult vocabulary so it would be the best side of mine in essay..moreover,umpteen means many.. and for sure i will work on my punctuation knowledge..
ankush   
Feb 21, 2013
Writing Feedback / Now day's crime is increasing. Why is this happening? What can government do? [8]

AS WE HAVE BEEN LIVING IN ADVANCED AND DEVELOPED AGE WHICH GIVES MANY COMFORTS AND GOOD LIVING STYLE TO MORTALS AS COMPARE TO BYGONE ERA BUT STILL THERE ARE SOME SINS IN OUR SOCIETY,ONE OF THEM IS CRIME WHICH IS UP SURGING DAY BY DAY. I ASSERT WITH THE GIVEN STATEMENT DUE TO UMPTEEN REASONS.

FIRST AND FOREMOST REASON OF INCREASING IN CRIME IS AN UNEMPLOYMENT WHICH ENFORCED ARE YOUNGSTERS TO FALL IN THIS MUD OF DARKNESS BECAUSE DUE TO COMPUTERIZATION MAN WORK IS SHRINKING LIKE ANYTHING WHERE COMPUTER IS CAPABLE ENOUGH TO DO 10 TIMES WORK THAN MAN DO .AS MONEY WOULD NOT BE THERE SO AS USUALLY YOUNGSTERS CAUSED CRIME FOR FULFILLING THEIR BASIC NEEDS .MOREOVER DUE TO UNEDUCATION THOSE WHO DIDN'T GET JOB AND TURN INTO THE WORLD OF AN OFFENSE .AS IT'S CARRIED OUT BY ONE OF THE SURVEY IN 2008 THAT 70% CRIMINALS DO CRIME FOR THEIR PERSONAL NEEDS WHERE REST FOR A FUN PURPOSE OR TO THREATEN OTHERS,APART FROM THESE FACTORS ONE'S SOCIETY,MORAL VALUES GIVEN BY PARENTS ARE THE MAJOR CONTRIBUTOR TO MAKE A GOOD CITIZEN IF SOMEONE DON'T GET THAT EVEN IT WOULD BE THE COMMENCE OF CRIMINAL.

THE CRIME CAN BE DECREASED BY FOLLOWING SOME CERTAIN SET OF RULES WHERE PUBLIC PARTICIPATION MUST BE THERE TO SUPPORT LAWS BECAUSE ABUSE OF LAWS ARE INEVITABLE IN TODAY'S WORLD. GOVERNMENT CAN OPEN NEW OPPORTUNITIES BY MAKING A FOUNDATION OF NEW INDUSTRIAL CONCEPTS AND STARTING SMALL SCALE INDUSTRIES AS WELL.GUARDIANS MUST ENSURE THAT THEY ARE PROVIDING A PROPER EDUCATION TO THEIR CHILDREN ,NOT ONLY EDUCATION THEY ARE RESPONSIBLE TO ENHANCE THEIR MORAL AND SPIRITUAL INTELLIGENCE WHERE GOVERNMENT ROLE TO AVAIL EFFECTIVE AND ECONOMICAL SOURCES FOR ASPIRANT ACADEMIC TRAINING.

IN CRUX, I BELIEVE THAT GOVERNMENT SHOULD IMPOSE SUCH KIND OF LAWS THOSE MUST BE STRICT AND UNDER THE CONTROL OF GOVERNMENT AND THEIR EMPLOYEES SO THAT IT COULD WORK PROPERLY AS IT HAS BEEN WORKING IN POWER NATIONS OF THIS UNIVERSE.
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