Posts by lcpan913

lcpan913

Feb 25, 2013

Writing Feedback / What is more important? Making large amounts of money or living a comfortable life? [5]

Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living.

Many things, which people need and want, require be bought or obtained by use money, there is no denying the important of money. Without it, it's difficult to live a comfortable life. However, I think earning a comfortable living is more important than making large amounts of money. The followings, which are more important than making money, to support my opinion:

First of all, I believe that relationship is more important than making money because family can't be bought by money. For example, many people lack communication with their children because of long time working, it's easy to break the relationship between parents and children which is difficult to build again. However, people spend more time to get along with their family members and friends, this can provide happiness and comfortable to their, not only material enjoyment.

Another importance is health. Health can't be bought as same as family, health require human have good lifestyle and customs, such as always work out and eat enough green. However, if you make large amounts of money, but you lose your health, everything will be meaningless. Therefore, I think people should spend more time to keep their health, not only care for making money.

Finally, I think third importance is relaxation. We should enjoy our life, such as travel. Don't make too much stress for making money. In many cases, people stress over in their working, it's easy to have mood disorders. Therefore, I think people should relax, not just only care about working.

As you can see, there are important things should be cared. At the same time, over working bring disadvantage to us. Therefore, I think earning a comfortable living is more important than making large amounts of money.

lcpan913

Feb 25, 2013

Writing Feedback / Teachers need to motivate their students to ask everything they don't understand [3]

i think the conclusion is short...

lcpan913

Feb 23, 2013

Writing Feedback / IELTSďźTechnology has influenced the way people interact with each other! [5]

i'm not very well in English writing, but i think there have some good ideas.

lcpan913

Feb 22, 2013

Writing Feedback / human should esteem and value their pets like family members [5]

it's a rewriting, i don't know that has improvement or not...

Nowadays, many people like to raise many kind of pets, one of common example are a dogs or cats. Raising pets require more time, love, and money to care them and build relationship. Therefore, I believe that pets should be treated family members, there are three reasons to explain my opinion.

First of all, people raise pets because of interesting and relaxation, and pets offer lots of benefit to people, such as experience of raising, communicating with other animals. When people were playing with their pets always feel happy. Therefore, if people decide to raise pets, they should take care their pets very carefully and friendly, and have responsibility to take care their pets, keeping their pets safe as much as they can, just like their children.

Second, we can't forget the true, pets are same to human, and they are life. Although pet's communication ways are different from human, they still have their languages and behaviors, and people still can understand their feeling or behaviors by other ways. For example, dogs are very common which be raised. Although they can't speak any human language, people still can base on their body language to understand how they feel. That means people should treat their pets as a family member.

Third, pets should be treated family member, because people are pets everything. Pets are different from people, they can't like people to go outside activity or meet other friends by themselves. For example, dogs can't go to park to walk or buy some foods to eat by themselves, they do everything that need people help them. That means if pets without people's care, they can't live in human's community for long time.

In conclusion, even though pets are very different from human, they still are life. At the same time, when people raise their pets, pets also bring happiness and good experience to us, so i believe that we should treat them as family members and take care their life.

lcpan913

Feb 22, 2013

Writing Feedback / human should esteem and value their pets like family members [5]

Nowadays, many people like to raise many kind of pets, one of common example are a dogs or cats. Raising pets require more time, love, and money to care them and build relationship. Therefore, I believe that pets should be treated like family members, there are three reasons to support my opinion.

First reason is that animals were living in the wild, they became pets because human caught and raised them, it behavior change the animal's way of life and their ability of living, so that human have responsibility to take care them like a family members, looking after their everything. But pets are different form human that mean they can't go to work, to meet other friends, to study how to live in human community by themselves. It means their life almost only for human who is their family, so that it's important to pets that human treated them a family member.

A second reason is like first one, human raised pet for their enjoyment. Although some parts of pets are different from human, such communicational ways and behaviors, they still have their feelings, languages, and behaviors. Therefore, I think pets should be treated family member to live with human. At the same time, human should be esteem and understand their pets.

Third reason is that pets also can teach something to human. For example, children have communication with pets that they can learn other animal's behavior and how to stand with other animals. It's important for their growing up and understand human have to get along with other life.

Finally, I believe that pets should be treated like family members, and human should esteem and value their pets, because human are pet everything, without human care and raise, they can't live in human community very well and safe.