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IELTS:Technology has influenced the way people interact with each other!


kimilonely 1 / 1  
Feb 22, 2013   #1
Could you please take a look at my answer and provide some feedback? What do you think i would score if i wrote this during the actual exam? Thx a lot!!

topic: (IELTS Writing Task 2)
Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

My answer:

Technology has completely transformed the way we live our lives, including how we interact with other people. Thanks to cell phones, computers and internet, we are connected to the world every second. Friends overseas can be reached in the blink of an eye, and a total stranger can help me out by simply answer the question I posted online. Technology has dramatically influenced the types of relationships we have, and the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.

First of all, we are making more friends with the help of the internet. By connecting virtually every parts of the world, the internet bring people together which used to be impossible with the ease of a click of the mouse. People with rare interest such as doll collecting no longer feel alone. Many different communities and groups of particular interests have been set up and people who share the same interests can be easily found. Furthermore, there are many support groups, forums aiming to help people and share experiences. Total strangers come together and give each other a helping hand with no money involved. Such relationships are relatively rare in the real world, yet extremely valuable. Another case in point is when people providing homestays to travellers who they only knew through the internet.

Nevertheless, not all changes are good. Text messages, emails have substantially reduced the amount of face-to-face contact we make with others. We become isolated from the real world and would rather hide ourselves behind a screen. Relationships which used to mean hanging out with your friends, may now just be a few text messages and some "smiley faces".

In spite of the negative development, the positive, as far as I am concerned, has been far more profound, and therefore, outweighs the negative.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Feb 22, 2013   #2
we are connected towith the world every second.

and a total stranger can help me out by simply answering the question I posted online

... yes... it's happening now ;)

By connecting virtually every parts of the world

By connecting instantly with the people of every nook and corner of the world
Give specific examples for this point... talk about facebook, twitter :)
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Feb 22, 2013   #3
hai Kate..

Overall good attempt..
Good flow and esay to understand..

You can include video calling, which reduces the need of travelling to meet friends, relatives even clients.

Tessy
OP kimilonely 1 / 1  
Feb 22, 2013   #4
we are connected to with the world every second.

What's the difference between connected to and connected with??

Give specific examples for this point... talk about facebook, twitter :)

You can include video calling, which reduces the need of travelling to meet friends, relatives even clients.

Thx for the ideas guys!!
lcpan913 2 / 3  
Feb 23, 2013   #5
i'm not very well in English writing, but i think there have some good ideas.


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