kassiag
Mar 25, 2013
Scholarship / My Mom/ Origami/My dad's stroke; Questbridge College Prep Scholarship [5]
I think it's good, haven't saw something to change... good work!
I think it's good, haven't saw something to change... good work!
kassiag
Mar 25, 2013
Undergraduate / I'm a DREMER; Characteristics or perspectives I possess that make me unique [4]
I posted before but I did a new one and I really need your help to tell me if it's ok or it it's a gramatical error or that stuff. Please, I would really appreciate your help.
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Everybody is unique in their special way, some just haven't figured it out yet. I did. My way is being a dreamer. Not a lot of people are dreamers nowadays, and dreams are the most important thing in a human being. We all dream when sleeping, but few of us are awake dreamers, people that have achievements to beat, who will think of things that may seem impossible and will do the possible to achieve them, who have goals in life, who does not give up. If you don't dream, you won't have what to live for.
Dreamers are the most important people in the world because without them, there would be no one to discover and develop necessary things for humanity, without them we would still live in precarious conditions. It's known that the world need dreamers and doers but, most of all, dreamers who do, and that is rare and difficult. We are often called stupid because people think we can't achieve our "impossible" dreams and in the most times they privet and discourage us from doing necessary stuff to achieve it, because they believe it's a waste of time and it will never come true, but as Walt Disney used to say: "If you can dream it, you can do it.", it's up to us to find a way and when we do it, they don't understand how you achieved it, after all, it was "impossible".
I believe that a head which is full of fears will have no space for dreams. Dreamers fight for things they want without fearing the obstacles, they don't limit themselves to imagine. They face all their challenges until get into the goal. That's why dreamers are, above all, fighters. The realistic know where they are going, but the dreamers went there before and they know what needs to be changed, they try to make it true.
Of course we can't only focus in our big dreams and forget the small ones, they are special too. It's common between kids to dream with all possible things and those ideas might be the ones that will last in their minds while they grow. When I was a kid, I dreamed I would have lots of things. Some of the dreams gone with the time but, for example, I still dream with a tree house and when I have my own home, I will certainly build one because this dream is still in me. If it is important for you, you never stop believing, and someday you will reach it and remember why this was so important. So, when I build my tree house and enter in it, I will remember how to be a kid again and will be full of happiness, that happiness of when you have just achieved a dream. It is a uniqueness feeling that makes us feel unique and special, for being so effortful, determined and for knowing that no one in the world would understand our happiness just because we built a tree house. Dreamers know where they are going, they just don't know how to get there. But they will find out, because they are unique and unique people change the world.
I posted before but I did a new one and I really need your help to tell me if it's ok or it it's a gramatical error or that stuff. Please, I would really appreciate your help.
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Everybody is unique in their special way, some just haven't figured it out yet. I did. My way is being a dreamer. Not a lot of people are dreamers nowadays, and dreams are the most important thing in a human being. We all dream when sleeping, but few of us are awake dreamers, people that have achievements to beat, who will think of things that may seem impossible and will do the possible to achieve them, who have goals in life, who does not give up. If you don't dream, you won't have what to live for.
Dreamers are the most important people in the world because without them, there would be no one to discover and develop necessary things for humanity, without them we would still live in precarious conditions. It's known that the world need dreamers and doers but, most of all, dreamers who do, and that is rare and difficult. We are often called stupid because people think we can't achieve our "impossible" dreams and in the most times they privet and discourage us from doing necessary stuff to achieve it, because they believe it's a waste of time and it will never come true, but as Walt Disney used to say: "If you can dream it, you can do it.", it's up to us to find a way and when we do it, they don't understand how you achieved it, after all, it was "impossible".
I believe that a head which is full of fears will have no space for dreams. Dreamers fight for things they want without fearing the obstacles, they don't limit themselves to imagine. They face all their challenges until get into the goal. That's why dreamers are, above all, fighters. The realistic know where they are going, but the dreamers went there before and they know what needs to be changed, they try to make it true.
Of course we can't only focus in our big dreams and forget the small ones, they are special too. It's common between kids to dream with all possible things and those ideas might be the ones that will last in their minds while they grow. When I was a kid, I dreamed I would have lots of things. Some of the dreams gone with the time but, for example, I still dream with a tree house and when I have my own home, I will certainly build one because this dream is still in me. If it is important for you, you never stop believing, and someday you will reach it and remember why this was so important. So, when I build my tree house and enter in it, I will remember how to be a kid again and will be full of happiness, that happiness of when you have just achieved a dream. It is a uniqueness feeling that makes us feel unique and special, for being so effortful, determined and for knowing that no one in the world would understand our happiness just because we built a tree house. Dreamers know where they are going, they just don't know how to get there. But they will find out, because they are unique and unique people change the world.
kassiag
Mar 24, 2013
Scholarship / If I could trade places with any superhero or villain for a day, who would I choose a [6]
I didn't understanded this part: "Here's how I think the conversation would go "You want to trade places with me?? I am not sure you know what you are really asking for. Its not always fun and excitement, like when I swoop in to help someone put down a gun, you know. It can be boring at times. Like for example, I spend a lot of time watching people meditate. You seem pretty determined. Tell me why" because I want to contribute to the peace in the world" I want to deliver the experience of peace to people, see the relief on their faces feel the joy in their hearts" why should you get to have all the fun?" How about if I let you be my sidekick? you can do it on your own, you know. It starts with you."
I guess there's no need to this paragraph. You could improve more the first paragraph of why do you want to be this superhero and the other parts you cut. I like these "You build your powers by truly listening to your own peaceful nature, by listening to others you invoke compassion, which is peace for others and by listening to nature. There are messages all over the place. You need only to tune into them.
My second and third choices would definitely be Get-out-of-bed-even-when-you-don't-want-to Man who tirelessly swoops in to save your day Monday through Friday. And, Gratitude Girl who comes to you in your darkest hour and reminds you of all the good things in your life." but i don't know it that last one fits... Try to increase the first paragraph If I could trade places with any superhero undoubtedly my first choice would be PeaceMan. Peaceman?? Yes. Though not as popular as Batman or The Tick, I did read somewhere once that big name heroes like Wonder Woman and Plastic Man interned with him before hitting the streets on their own. Why would I want to be Peace Man? Who wouldn't want to be Peace Man, is a better question. His extraordinary powers and abilities are to swoop down and reach anyone who is in search of him, anyone in need. He can be anywhere and everywhere at all times. No need for a red phone or fancy whistling skills. Also, he has no physical form, constantly morphing from a symbol to a feeling. Though sometimes visible, other times he materializes only as an experience. I think that is cool. with more reasons you want to be Peaceman xD
I didn't understanded this part: "Here's how I think the conversation would go "You want to trade places with me?? I am not sure you know what you are really asking for. Its not always fun and excitement, like when I swoop in to help someone put down a gun, you know. It can be boring at times. Like for example, I spend a lot of time watching people meditate. You seem pretty determined. Tell me why" because I want to contribute to the peace in the world" I want to deliver the experience of peace to people, see the relief on their faces feel the joy in their hearts" why should you get to have all the fun?" How about if I let you be my sidekick? you can do it on your own, you know. It starts with you."
I guess there's no need to this paragraph. You could improve more the first paragraph of why do you want to be this superhero and the other parts you cut. I like these "You build your powers by truly listening to your own peaceful nature, by listening to others you invoke compassion, which is peace for others and by listening to nature. There are messages all over the place. You need only to tune into them.
My second and third choices would definitely be Get-out-of-bed-even-when-you-don't-want-to Man who tirelessly swoops in to save your day Monday through Friday. And, Gratitude Girl who comes to you in your darkest hour and reminds you of all the good things in your life." but i don't know it that last one fits... Try to increase the first paragraph If I could trade places with any superhero undoubtedly my first choice would be PeaceMan. Peaceman?? Yes. Though not as popular as Batman or The Tick, I did read somewhere once that big name heroes like Wonder Woman and Plastic Man interned with him before hitting the streets on their own. Why would I want to be Peace Man? Who wouldn't want to be Peace Man, is a better question. His extraordinary powers and abilities are to swoop down and reach anyone who is in search of him, anyone in need. He can be anywhere and everywhere at all times. No need for a red phone or fancy whistling skills. Also, he has no physical form, constantly morphing from a symbol to a feeling. Though sometimes visible, other times he materializes only as an experience. I think that is cool. with more reasons you want to be Peaceman xD
kassiag
Mar 24, 2013
Undergraduate / Radiography program application essay question [2]
I guess you could be more especific, develop more the answers, more reasons of why do you want to follow this path, these stuff
I guess you could be more especific, develop more the answers, more reasons of why do you want to follow this path, these stuff
kassiag
Mar 24, 2013
Undergraduate / What characteristics or perspectives do you possess that make you unique? [2]
What characteristics or perspectives do you possess that make you unique? Please describe in detail (up to 500 words)
What makes me unique? Well, it's always hard to describe yourself, but I'll try. I can say that I'm perfectionist, if I do something, it will be good, because I hate to let something incomplete, and I won't lie, sometimes because of that I don't fit in work groups. But I always find a way to work with that and accept the differences and the other ideas. I guess it's not just because I'm perfectionist, but I'm also insecure and distrustful for that stuff. I never know if the other people are going to do a good work and it will be bad for me if they don't, since it's a group work. I can always look ahead, creating situations and solutions for them if necessary, so when it happens I will know how to fix. I am a dreamer and I guess it's very good because what is the world if not made of dreams? Another thing: I'm stubborn and obstinate. A lot. I'll always defend my ideas and have arguments for them, and I'll discuss until I win. If I want something, I won't give up! I will find a way to get it, don't matter the cost. I have an incredible thirst of knowledge, I love to learn new things, new cultures, new culinary, new idioms, whatever it is, I will love learn about it and if I want to learn something in the most times I won't pay for classes, I'll learn it by myself, at home, I think this makes me smarter and maybe I'll learn better by my own way than by the other's way. I always help people when they need; I constantly help my mom with my little sisters, and I love to give gifts or donations to poor kids when it's possible. Other interesting fact: I see problems as a challenge, it's never something to be mad and start crying and enter in deeply depression. No. A problem is something that need to be solved, if it's on your way is because life is testing you and will have worst things that you shall face. It's more like a test, so you need to solve the problems, face it like a challenge and be ready for the next. It also works when someone criticizes me, I just move on. I don't care about what people think about me, the important is what I think, so if I do something, I don't think what other people may think, I just do it. I'm very honest, because a lie will always be discovered, so it's better you tell the truth before than after you lie. I always want the best to the next, no matter what they maybe did to me, it's always bad wish the evil to others, so I try to avoid it. I'm very organized, especially with school stuff. I have a lot of to-do lists, they are on papers in my bedroom, they are in my cellphone, on my copybook, everywhere! This way I don't forget what I have to do and it's very helpful in a test's week. You are probably thinking: "but you just described yourself, why does this makes you unique?".Yeah, I described myself just the way I am, and no one in Earth may have the exactly personality as mine, so it makes me unique. Everyone is unique, maybe some people don't know that and some people seems to don't like it, because they try to be someone else. There's a quote that I like, that talks about it:
"We are all born originals - why is it so many of us die copies?" - Edward Young
So, why try to copy others? You are the way you are and you don't have to copy others. Just be yourself. All that everybody have in common is that everybody is unique, just like you. But on their own ways.
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So, i tought it is a little confuse... what do you think? Please tell me if there's some concordance or gramatical error, because i'm Brazilian.
What characteristics or perspectives do you possess that make you unique? Please describe in detail (up to 500 words)
What makes me unique? Well, it's always hard to describe yourself, but I'll try. I can say that I'm perfectionist, if I do something, it will be good, because I hate to let something incomplete, and I won't lie, sometimes because of that I don't fit in work groups. But I always find a way to work with that and accept the differences and the other ideas. I guess it's not just because I'm perfectionist, but I'm also insecure and distrustful for that stuff. I never know if the other people are going to do a good work and it will be bad for me if they don't, since it's a group work. I can always look ahead, creating situations and solutions for them if necessary, so when it happens I will know how to fix. I am a dreamer and I guess it's very good because what is the world if not made of dreams? Another thing: I'm stubborn and obstinate. A lot. I'll always defend my ideas and have arguments for them, and I'll discuss until I win. If I want something, I won't give up! I will find a way to get it, don't matter the cost. I have an incredible thirst of knowledge, I love to learn new things, new cultures, new culinary, new idioms, whatever it is, I will love learn about it and if I want to learn something in the most times I won't pay for classes, I'll learn it by myself, at home, I think this makes me smarter and maybe I'll learn better by my own way than by the other's way. I always help people when they need; I constantly help my mom with my little sisters, and I love to give gifts or donations to poor kids when it's possible. Other interesting fact: I see problems as a challenge, it's never something to be mad and start crying and enter in deeply depression. No. A problem is something that need to be solved, if it's on your way is because life is testing you and will have worst things that you shall face. It's more like a test, so you need to solve the problems, face it like a challenge and be ready for the next. It also works when someone criticizes me, I just move on. I don't care about what people think about me, the important is what I think, so if I do something, I don't think what other people may think, I just do it. I'm very honest, because a lie will always be discovered, so it's better you tell the truth before than after you lie. I always want the best to the next, no matter what they maybe did to me, it's always bad wish the evil to others, so I try to avoid it. I'm very organized, especially with school stuff. I have a lot of to-do lists, they are on papers in my bedroom, they are in my cellphone, on my copybook, everywhere! This way I don't forget what I have to do and it's very helpful in a test's week. You are probably thinking: "but you just described yourself, why does this makes you unique?".Yeah, I described myself just the way I am, and no one in Earth may have the exactly personality as mine, so it makes me unique. Everyone is unique, maybe some people don't know that and some people seems to don't like it, because they try to be someone else. There's a quote that I like, that talks about it:
"We are all born originals - why is it so many of us die copies?" - Edward Young
So, why try to copy others? You are the way you are and you don't have to copy others. Just be yourself. All that everybody have in common is that everybody is unique, just like you. But on their own ways.
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So, i tought it is a little confuse... what do you think? Please tell me if there's some concordance or gramatical error, because i'm Brazilian.
