Writing Feedback / If I have enough money what would I do? Purchase either a house or a business? TOEFL [2]

You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

Without denying, people need to home to relax in there and need to business to get the money. If we do not have any business, it is not possible for us to afford our life. The salary of a clerk is not so good and people prefer to have their own businesses. If we do not have a house where would we get rid of our stressful daily work? I can say that both of them are important but by lots of reasons I would to pay my money for a business.

First and the most important, by making a business we can have money and in result we can afford for buying a house. In additional I can use than my money for spending my leisure time not only in the home also some other sites like shoreline. For a brief journey nowadays we need to lots of money for affording. By purchasing of our house we do not have any money and because I am a clerk, I would not afford for any other things. So I prefer to make a business as my second job and I could thrive and make a buck in it I would resign for my past job.

Some times it will be very good if we think about other people and help to them. For donation it is not necessary to have lots of money. It is my idea if we give our money in a direct way to the broke people, it will be very awful for our community. We should make a job for them. The root of any crime is poverty. Poverty is a direct result of unemployee. In nutshell, if I make a business, I will make lots of jobs for another people and it will be very helpful for reducing the crime in the country. So if any body have a long horizontal like donation, he should make a business.

All in all, by making a business we will help not only to ourself also for our community.

Writing Feedback / Single world culture; TOEFL; the same internet, television programs and language [5]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Admittedly, technology is growing faster and faster in this century. Technology has created a lot of differences in our society. Every moment,the world is changing. Everyday, if we catch news on television we can find a lot of inventions. In my idea, technology by using than internet, satellites and etc has influenced on our cultures and people in all over the are more similar to each other comparing to the past.

At first, the most important thing which can influence on our culture, is the television. By invention of satellite, people in all over the world can watch the same television program. Some of the series become more popular, so those can impact to our culture. If an especial actor is hero, so young adults prefer to be as he. They prefer to wear same clothes like he. They will talk in his manner. If we look at news, do not exist anybody who denys that BBC is the most famous channel in all of the world. If any body are catching same news, so if the guideline of the news is that a culture is better, so without doubt people attracted toward that.

In second hand, I can say that internet has power to change our culture toward the center of it, I mean the united states. When we are surfing on internet, if we see that something is more famous, so we will like it. We will attracted to it. People are looking up at google and would like to know what is the up to date clothe. So I think when we are using than same internet, the result is the same culture.

Last but not least, is the language. The most popular language is English. If we use than the same language, in result, we will act and influenced by same culture. Nowadays, people are attracted to get high education. People would like to go to universities and get high degrees. In result, people must learn English language which the source of all the sciences is USA. If we would love to learn same language, we will influenced by the leaders of the English literature.

In nutshell, when we are using than same internet, television programs, and language, our attitude will attracted toward the same culture.