Writing Feedback / Sixty nine percent of waste materials in Korea is being disposed of by means of recycling [4]

The pie charts illustrate the 5 different types of waste disposal which are recycling, incineration, underground, chemical treatment and dumping at sea that the Republic of Korea, Sweden and the United Kingdom are applying.

Sixty nine percent of waste materials in Korea is being disposed of by means of recycling. While in Sweden and the UK, 55% and 82% of their garbage are being buried underground. Apparently, Korea and Sweden does not practice the process of disposing unwanted resources with the use of chemical treatment nor dumping at sea. However, it is upsetting to know that both of these countries destroy 9% and 20% of their rubbish through a process called incineration, respectively. It is also interesting to note, that although the UK mostly exercise underground burying of waste materials, it is also the only country among the three mentioned above that manages disposal of waste by treating it with harmful chemicals, dumping at sea and incinerates trash with the following percentages, 8%, 8% and 2%, correspondingly.

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Writing Feedback / A number of facts as to why computers are considered more of a disadvantage than an advantage. [3]

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic.
Some people consider computers to be more of a hindrance than a help. Others believe that they have greatly increased human potential.
How could computers be considered a hindrance?
Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples form your own experience.
Write at least 250 words.
The evolution of computers and technology has been drastic over the years and has made an enormous impact around the world. It is being utilized in many areas such as from simple homes to the school and workplaces, and even in further discovery of the outer space. This brief essay will point out a number of facts as to why computers are considered more of a disadvantage than an advantage.

Some people say that computers are quite helpful in various ways, but for others, it is limiting their optimum potential as human beings, not to mention it is causing personal and psychological problems to others. For instance, in some households where computers are a necessity, they are more prone to developing communication problems among themselves. The tendency is that, it would cause them to interact less with each other and self-isolation will take place. Also, another example is that in the case of children going to school, instead of developing their physical and psychosocial abilities through social interactions, they are more likely limiting themselves by sitting in one corner with their computers or other devices. Furthermore, in workplaces employees get distracted by playing computer games and social networking sites, thereby resulting in inefficiency in work production. Most importantly, computers are the portal to pornography and cyber-crimes such as cyber bullying and scams. Pornography could bring about teenagers to engage in sexual activities and get pregnant at an early age while cyber-crimes such as bullying could have a devastating effect on one's self-esteem, and scams like money laundering might give rise to bigger crimes in the future such as robbery.

In conclusion, the disadvantages actually outweigh the advantages of the use of computers as it causes more problems for most people. Personally, I would suggest that more security would be implemented with the use of computers such as limiting the time of its use and heavier supervision. It is also noteworthy that the government should actively be involved in monitoring the crimes mentioned above to avoid further chaos in the society.

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Writing Feedback / The two illustrations show Coca-cola Company's percentage of sales in a pie graph [4]

The two illustrations show Coca-cola Conpany's percentage of sales in a pie graph and share price in a line graph from year 1996 to 2001.

The pie chart shows that among these countries namely, North America, Africa and Middle East, Asia, Europe and Latin America, it is quite obvious that North America has the highest percentage of sales with 30.4%. It is then followed by Latin America with 25.7% and Europe with 5.2% difference from Latin America. However, poor sales is evident in Africa and Middle East with only 7.0%.

The line graph however, depicts the share prices of Coca-Cola from 1996 to 2001. It can be seen that in 1996, the share price was only $35, and then dramatically rose to $70 in 1997, double the price of the previous year. Unfortunately, the share price fell slightly to approximately $55 but the company was able to increase its share to more or less $80 the following year, making 1998 the most remarkable year for the company so far. But then, 2 years later, the company suffered a loss of share price that dropped to only about $48-$60.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Arranged Marriage vs Love Marraige / Discuss both systems [2]

Topic: In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in the other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems.

Marriage is defined as a union between two or more people that established certain rights and obligations and is enormously affected by one's values, culture and tradition depending on which country you came from. This essay will tackle the issue on marriages planned by the parents or a third party commonly known as 'arranged marriages' and selecting your own spouse or what we call 'love marriages.'

Arranged marriages are common in royal and aristocratic families and roughly practiced in countries like India, Pakistan and China. In India for instance, decisions pertaining to marriage are taken by elders of the respective family with the intention of keeping the caste lines intact. Also in Pakistan, two families agree to marry their children while they are still infant, or even before they are born but the actual marriage takes place when the bride and groom are already in their late teens. In order for a family to arrange the marriage of their son, they must also have a daughter to be married in return. But in the case of China, the primacy of family negotiation and observance of traditional rules are more characteristic of arranged marriage. The groom's parents usually investigate the reputation and lineage of the bride's family. The bride's family takes the opportunity tO ask about the status and wealth of the groom's family to ensure that their daughter will be treated well.

However, if you belong to some Western countries and family with Western values, you might have a different perspective from that of arranged marriages. Chances are, first, you would think that love is the most important factor to consider when choosing a perspective spouse. Second, you would have individual autonomy. In other words, you have the option of choosing the person you want to be with for the rest of your life. Third, you would have an informed decision. Since you know your partner well on a personal level, you know what to expect then. And lastly, love. It unites two hearts and share every emotions and understand each other, as love conquers all.

In conclusion, marriages from around the world greatly varies and is mostly influenced by culture and traditions. Although arranged marriages may sound negative, for some it means living and preserving their heritage and passing on the tradition to the next future generation. So whether you go for arranged marriage or love marriage, both system requires trust and commitment which are essential for a relationship to work out.

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Writing Feedback / The eating habits and lifestyle change of the new generation. [2]

IELTS Topic: In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyle of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Recently, the eating habits and lifestyle of children has drastically changed from those of previous generation and is a major concern in many countries today causing negative effects primarily on health. Poor eating habits and sedentary lifestyle caused by the continuous evolution of high technology are some of the contributing factors on the increasing health problems worldwide. In this essay, I will discuss the above-mentioned issue and the danger it brings along.

With regards to eating habits, providing health and nutritious foods to the children are the parents' primary responsibility. In the case of children in the past for example, if only one parent is working to provide for the financial needs of the family, the other parent would have ample time to prepare and select appropriate nutritious foods foods belonging to the food groups go, glow and grow such as rice, meat, milk and vegetables and pay the required attention the children need. The parents act as a role model by showing to their kids, that they too, eat healthy foods and making sure they eat balanced diet. Also, they promote active lifestyle by spending a lot of time outdoors such as having picnics and engaging to sports as a form of exercise, this making their lives less sedentary.

However, living in a busy and highly sophisticated community greatly affects the interest of the children today, For instance, due to the fast-paced life, specifically in the key citied of the country, parents are too busy to prepare home-cooked foods. Fast food chains has been the solution to that problem. Parents resort to buying foods instead of personally cooking healthy meals at home. Although these establishments make our lives easier, what we are not aware of is that these unhealthy foods can raise the risk for cardiovascular diseases such as atherosclerosis, hypertension and stroke. Another, is the influence of technology. Devices such as cellular phones, TV, computer and other consoles has taken the attention of these youngsters instead of focusing on educational activities which can be a huge boost to their formative years. The children unknowingly becoming antisocial, develop violent behaviors and a sedentary lifestyle by engaging to these kind of activities, instead of developing their psychosocial and cognitive skills through frequent interaction with different people and utilizing their problem-solving strategies at an early age.

In conclusion, this essay explained how and why today's generation of food preference and lifestyle has changed. In my point of view, parents should inculcate to the minds of their children the habit of eating healthy foods and its benefits and organize activities to be done to stay healthy and fit.

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