Writing Feedback / IETLS TASK 2; More money should be spend on education and sports? [4]

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government should spend more money on education than on sport
Do you agree ao disagree?

Education plays an important role in improving people's life since the down of time. Throughout the history, governments have provided humanity not only with works but also with the knowledge. It is agreed that spending more money on education is beneficial for people more than the sport. This argument will be proven by liking at how education can both reduce poverty and help people to increase their knowledge and discover things about the world.

Firstly, the most important thing for education is reducing the poverty, particularly, in poor countries such as India. For instance, some of the Indian people who have finished their education are working now in different places all around the world. For this reason, the number of poverty will went down later. As this example shows, education has a positive effect on reducing poverty. In addition to this, the educated people will have more opportunities in discovering the world widely. For example, when I was at college I have learned a lot of things about learning English. This helps me to increase my skills on acquiring the language.

After analyzing these two points, this look at how the education can reduce the number of poor people and help them to discover the world. It has proven that spending money on education has more pros than cons. Thus, it is highly recommended

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1; GDP Growth for 3 different countries [3]

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This bar chart shows the percentages of the GDP growth for three different countries over a period of four years starting in 2007. It is clear that the largest number of the GDP growth was in Japan with around 6,5% by year 2010. In 2008, the rate of GDP increased steadily by just 5% in Ecuador. In addition, there was a significant rise in Tunsia by about 6,4% in 2007, while this percentage went down sharply to 4.5% in 2008. The lowest rate was also in Ecuador in 2009 with approximately 1,2% of GDP.

In Japan, the number of GDP fell dramatically to just under 2% in 2007, but it increased gradually to 5% after two years.
To sum up, the number of GDP went up gradually in Japan, but dropped in both Ecuador and Tunsia.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1; Internet Usage in Taiwan during 3 years from 1998 [6]

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This bar chart shows the number of different ages among people in Taiwan who used the internet over a period of three years starting in 1998. It is clear that the largest number of the internet users was the young people aged between 16-30 years old with 53% in 1998. After two years, this number of users dropped significantly to about 44%. In addition, there was a sharp increase of the internet users aged between 31-51 years old with around 40% while this percentage went down by just 37% in 2000. The lowest percentage in this figure was for children aged less than15 years old with 2% in

1998. However, this number increased gradually to 9% by year 2000.

To sum up, there was an increase for both children and older users from years 1999 to 2000. In contrast, the number of young users decreased significantly among three years.