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JOSCONIC

Jul 31, 2013

Writing Feedback / 1.) Prompt: Again and again we hear the complaint that we have no heroes anymore. [4]

1. one can be a hero today:by solving long standing problem.
2.one can be a hero today :by changing people motives.

JOSCONIC

Jul 31, 2013

Writing Feedback / Describe what responsibilty you think you will face as a GP in other country? [5]

. The sentences lack proper verb structure, like "As a doctor i would prefer to other country instead of staying in Iran" should be written as: as a doctor I would prefer living abroad rather than living in Iran. Also, "I want to continue my studying in a surgical field and will be a Neurosurgen in the near future", this sentence lacks lacks proper verb structure.This can be corrected by: I would love to continue my studies as a sturgeon. Also, this sentence lacks proper verb structure, and proper sentence connection:"In a hospital you have to face up to a large number of medical instruments which you do not find how they've gone to work. So training courses areneedednto be done", this can be corrected as:In a hospital one have to come across strange medical instruments. Moreover,one needs to undergo some training, so as to be able to operate the medical instrument. This also lacks sentence connection "One of the most important differences between countries is a culture. So considering studying for a culture of the new country should be one of the mkst serious tasks which will be needed to carry out. A job and human's life can be affected by anew culture"

JOSCONIC

Jul 31, 2013

Writing Feedback / 1.) Prompt: Again and again we hear the complaint that we have no heroes anymore. [4]

Topic: Is it possible to be a hero in the modern world
A Hero is a person that is known to have made great success and outstanding achievements and being admired for his or her nobility and courage. While, new invented technology and science; only bring new methods, ideas to human well being for a period of time.

Are heroes to be left in dark just because of newly invented technologies? The world is blessed with great intellectual that stood out despite civilization in the world. Examples of people who became a hero in this modern world are Nelson Mandela and Barak Obama. Nelson Mandela stood for peace and equality among all humankind. He was downtrodden and jailed for 27 years in prison just because he stood against apartheid in South Africa and in world in view. Fortunately, Nelson Mandela attitude brought changes to people motives, and also brought peace and development.

Also, Barak Obama won the president election in U.S.A by changing Americans motive through the word of 'hope' to bring back good standard of living. He spoke of hope to Americans and the world in general, that confession and possession brings transformation. He never used modern machineries to win Americans heart, but with the word of hope.

In conclusion, heroes will always increase rather than decrease, though in the modern world. For as Nelson Mandela and Barak Obama transformed the world through their attitude and motives helps to portray that an hero will always be known from time to time, despite in the modern world.