Undergraduate / "The only source of knowledge is experience." -The Coming of Age; childhood to adulthood [2]

Points to consider
- Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence which summaries what the paragraph is about.
- Appropriate linking words and phrases should be used to show the connection between paragraphs as well as to link sentences within a paragraph.

Introduction
Paragraph 1
state the problem and its cause(s)/consequence(s)
Main Body
Paragraph 2
suggestion 1 & result

Undergraduate / UW essay B. - The University of Washington seeks to create a community ... [2]

Good Essay, Impressive whereas in addition i would recommend you to indicate some words in you Essays.

To indicate a cause or reason:
Since
Because
Because of
Due to
For
For the reason that
As
Inasmuch as - Since
Whereby - As a result of which, By which, "the means whereby we achieved our goal"

Thanks

Undergraduate / From Uganda to Boston - Rutgers [3]

Hi good to see your effort but every essay must be accurate for sure. I found some important points by reading this Essay.

1-uses very emotional language
2-uses personal examples (e.g. I, Me, My...)

Undergraduate / FILM MAKING; Academic interests- USC (Film/TV Production) [4]

Hi good to see your effort but every essay must be accurate for sure. I found some important points by reading this Essay.

1-uses very emotional language
2-uses personal examples (e.g. I, Me, My...)

Best of Luck.

Graduate / "The physical and chemical properties" - Apply for Materials Science and Engineering [5]

ashokksel
I have collected Sample Sops. I have edited some of the personal details in the sample sops. If you haven't read Sample Statement of Purpose - contains tips from and actual example sops explained. I strongly suggest to read it before writing your admission essay.